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As His Hand Dances
Contributed by
pixie
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Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 12:25:34 PM in AEST
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As his hand dances across her face,
His clenched fist leaves more than a trace,
The more she cries the harder he hits,
As his fist touches her soft lip splits.
The tears flow down her cheeks,
This seems to happen every week,
Never does she do anything to deserve,
Just her presence gets on his nerves.
She hides her bruises very well,
Never leaving a sign that will tell,
Tell the world that she is another victim,
To a man with a temper thats grim.
She loves him with all her heart,
But he continues to tear her apart,
The beatings seem to get longer each time,
Maybe putting up with this is her only crime?
At night she lays in fear of her husband,
As she never knows just what hes planned,
She dare not speak, she dare not breathe,
If only she had the strength just to leave.
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Re: As His Hand Dances
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by In_a_while on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 12:34:03 PM AEST
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| Wow! that was extremely powerful, and evokes so much thought and emotion. The first stanza was expecially graphic and heartbreaking. Strong rhyming scheme too! Keep up the strong writing. |
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Re: As His Hand Dances
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by SimplyMe on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 12:36:34 PM AEST
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Oh my, Pix I pray to god this is not true. This is a very good poem, it brought me to tears. But i truely hope this is not real. I can't see such a strong woman as yourself putting up with this. Nobody deserves this treatment, under any circumstances. Be strong. Much love and a million *Hugs*
~Alucia~ |
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Re: As His Hand Dances
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by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 12:37:49 PM AEST
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Yes i agree that is a very powerful and deep poem.Wow Pixie girl as i read more and more of your poetry it just gets better and better.great job.
hugs |
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Re: As His Hand Dances
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by pixie on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 12:39:40 PM AEST
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Can I just add that this poem is not about me, I don't want anyone thinking that Mark hits me as he doesn't. My muse just spoke and out this came lol
take care
Pix xx |
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Re: As His Hand Dances
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by Jackee_line on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 01:04:59 PM AEST
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| well done , powerful poem |
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Re: As His Hand Dances
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by broken_hearted_loser on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 02:17:02 PM AEST
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| Wow, as all the others said ' Extremely Powerful '. Keep writing ! Your poems are great ! - much love - |
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Re: As His Hand Dances
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by fielding88 on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 02:19:32 PM AEST
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| What a sincere poem, and hopefully it's based purely on fiction, because it was a story that was truly touching in the fact that it could be true. Your rhymes here were special, giving the poem a very good ending, which in a sense, justifies or gives reason to why she still puts up with it. I just hope it's not a real story, because if anybody can write something like this, it denotes a lot of strength. Best of luck, lovely poem, no matter how sad it made me feel. |
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Re: As His Hand Dances
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 03:21:46 PM AEST
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| Yes a very powerful Piece Krisse....excellent as always!!! |
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Re: As His Hand Dances
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by lostinmyself on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 04:38:25 PM AEST
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Wow Krissie. This is a really good poem. To write so well about something you have never experienced is a hard thing to do. But you seem to have done it easily.
It is terrible how many women this happens to. I wish there were ways to help.
Great write sweetie,
*huggies* Phil xxx |
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Re: As His Hand Dances
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by lovingcritters on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 05:59:35 PM AEST
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Oh Pixie,
This is so like it truly is.........."If only she had the courage to leave!!!" But they must, or be killed. Did you know there is a wife beaten somewhere in the US. every 8 minutes!!!!!Isn't that horrid? I was on the abusive board for Safehouse here in Cheyenne, I heard story that would have turned your stomach on fire!!!!And yet, they simply can't leave.
This poem was spectacular, Pixie, you couldn't have said it better.
Bravo for you!!!!
Warm Love,
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Re: As His Hand Dances
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by Sinned on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 07:42:50 PM AEST
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Good strong write. I hope if girls read this they get the message. No man is worth any beatings. A man who strikes his mate is not a lover,but just a controler.
Godmessage to get across pixi
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Re: As His Hand Dances
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by Sinned on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 07:46:18 PM AEST
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Strong write Pixie.
I hope any girl who reads this gets the message. Any man who strikes a girl is a crontrol freak and not a lover.
Sinned |
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Re: As His Hand Dances
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by mysonnet on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 07:04:45 AM AEST
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omg.
this is a well-written poem. beautiful and powerful. |
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Re: As His Hand Dances
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by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 07:58:36 AM AEST
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Krissie, what a powerful write .
im glad to see you posting again. I love your writes.
Hope to talk to you soon.
Jane~ |
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Re: As His Hand Dances
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 03:10:29 PM AEST
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| very nicely written and expressed....it's hard to understand why women stay loyal under such abuse but to be there is to know I suppose...and leaving isn't always that easy |
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Re: As His Hand Dances
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by secretwind on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 07:55:04 PM AEST
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his hand break
deeply moving flow. |
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