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Goodbye world
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 03:37:52 PM in AEST
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Oh and in case people think I mean this, I don't. I'm not that type of person... (This is just a memory of how I have felt before...)
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Turn the trees to concrete,
And blow out all the stars,
Send the wind a-moaning,
And silence the guitars.
Let the rivers change direction,
Make the sun rise in the west,
The leaves go brown in springtime,
Until nothing good is left.
Stop the singers voices,
And the the poets written word,
Till the silence overwhelms me,
And no sound can be heard,
Then turn off all the daylight,
And light up all the night,
Switch grass around to gravel,
Until nothing left is right.
Close all the doors and windows,
Don't let the people breathe,
Freeze the ocean surface,
Let the rain come down and grieve,
Turn sand to ash upon the shore,
Stop the clouds appear somehow,
Make cooling rain sting and burn,
It doesn't matter now..
[Turn away the people, wanting,
Smirk as life becomes cold,
I know that you never really cared,
I hope you're happy with the world..]
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Re: Goodbye world
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by Kie-Kie on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 03:41:48 PM AEST
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Wow Philly
That's an amazing poem, and I'm sure glad you're not that kind of person because jiminy Christmas :-|
5 stars, honestly :D
Love ya,
~Kiela~ |
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Re: Goodbye world
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 03:52:53 PM AEST
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WOW!
Geez, Philly.... this... this is just fabulously done. Awesome write, hunni. I'm not about to muck it up with a big rambling comment either. I'm going back for a re-read...
*hugs*
~Snem~ |
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Re: Goodbye world
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 03:54:29 PM AEST
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| I'm glad you don't mean it. D**N Phil, I hate to say it but this is one of your best. I hope things are okay, and I hope you know I *do* care about you. And BTW, please leave me a comment on my journal so I can add you too. *hugs* J. |
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Re: Goodbye world
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by hooray_its_jen on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 04:05:06 PM AEST
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Phil, I would seriously put this in the "best poem of the day" forum, but I haven't been able to find it anywhere lately! I think it has disappeared.
Really though....you're amazing. Truly amazing.
Love, Jenna |
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Re: Goodbye world
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 04:40:45 PM AEST
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| superb write. take care. |
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Re: Goodbye world
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by Overstated on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 06:33:49 PM AEST
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| wow what can i say this is exceptional! beautifully composed loved the nature tie-ins reminded me of something i would write but obviously your style is a lot more established.excellent stuff. |
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Re: Goodbye world
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by DorianChambers on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 08:15:05 PM AEST
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What a beautiful picture you paint, i always do
2 things with your peices, 1. read it, 2. read it
again, did i say 2? meant 3, and 3? i sit and
look at it and think, i actually know the person,
who wrote this work of art. **********
(((((( PMT )))))) Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Goodbye world
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by Jenni_K on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 08:49:26 PM AEST
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Amazing write.....
(Glad you're not that type.....)
Jenni |
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Re: Goodbye world
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 08:52:16 PM AEST
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| well phil what is there to say that hasnt been said of your poem or your talent? the only things there are to be said is that your talent grows and grows, and i have yet to be amazed by your work. |
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Re: Goodbye world
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by Vampirequeen on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 06:09:35 AM AEST
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OMG philly i am glad you are just writing about it.
sheesh you had me there.
Dont scare me like that.
this write is so sad and deep girl.
an excellent write..
you get 5 stars..... |
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Re: Goodbye world
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by pixie on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 06:50:31 AM AEST
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awww Philly, that was so deep, you express yourself so effortlessly and always are 100% honest in your writes. I respect that about you. I hope that you can soon feel happy again hun, I dont like to see you feeling down like this. a very well written poem,
take care
Pix x |
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Re: Goodbye world
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by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 07:57:33 AM AEST
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Wow Philly, this was really powerful.
The emotions you did were just incredible.
I'm glad this not true tho, it would have been to sad to read.
Jane~ |
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Re: Goodbye world
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by Dawny on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 12:11:03 PM AEST
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I love the intense emotion and smooth flow, excellent
Love Dawny xxx |
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Re: Goodbye world
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by Willofree on
Tuesday, 26th April 2005 @ 10:53:51 AM AEST
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A powerful write, masterfully written. One view might be one of dissappointment and cynicism; or perhaps all the things this other person might miss out on.....
Anyway, a very cleverly written poem
Great job
Will |
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Re: Goodbye world
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 27th April 2005 @ 05:30:29 PM AEST
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Oh you!... Hugs Philly girl!
I knew you wouldn't mean it!
Seriousdly tho, this flows so well and the theme and cosistancy of the piece are well constructed. |
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Re: Goodbye world
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 29th April 2005 @ 11:29:19 PM AEST
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what an excellent masterpiece! im so happy to have read it, brilliant, moving, exquisite write:) big hugs n' lotsa love nessa
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Re: Goodbye world
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by Nazmythian on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 01:38:52 AM AEST
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This has my vote as one of your best ... and I am happy to have been able to get a brief preview. But i was not expecting the power that grew and continued here ... Phabulous Phil !!!!
Nazzy ~
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Re: Goodbye world
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by WAE on
Wednesday, 14th September 2005 @ 02:31:17 PM AEST
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After reading this poem, I think I should become a reader only...
What the energy flow...
Shocked, choked and petrified... |
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