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Touch my Life
Contributed by
sride686
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Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 12:22:19 PM in AEST
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I hate my life and I hate my soul
Rip my heart out and make it whole
Grip my heart and make it bleed
Drain my heart of all its lust and greed
Now touch my eyes and make them see
And breath your life back in to me
Now touch my heart and touch my soul
For my life is lost and out of control
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sride686
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2005-04-24 12:22:19]
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Re: Touch my Life
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by pixie on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 12:22:59 PM AEST
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a very powerful and deep poem, written with such raw emotions,
take care
Pix xx |
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Re: Touch my Life
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by kitty_express2001 on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 12:25:15 PM AEST
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That was very good.... it was well rymed and written!
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Re: Touch my Life
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by ruthy on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 12:59:09 PM AEST
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| very emotional and touching....well done... |
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Re: Touch my Life
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by mina-1 on
Monday, 25th April 2005 @ 09:23:10 PM AEST
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Steve this is an outstanding sad, but excellently written piece of poetry. I can feel ur pain and hope through ur words. There is hope for u still my dear friend. May ur heart be delievered with the truest of love that it deserves. Ure in my heart dear friend.
Love and hugs,
~sue~ |
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Re: Touch my Life
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by In_a_while on
Friday, 29th April 2005 @ 10:37:52 AM AEST
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| wow, this was really good. I thought the first stanza was full of action and imagery, i liked it. and the second stanza was particularly rhymeful and heartfelt. Very good stuff, i look forward to reading more as well. |
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