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Round and Round
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
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Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 02:04:35 PM in AEST
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Round and round this life I go
where I'll stop I cannot know
one less laugh and one more tear
feign the strength and hide the fear
feed the beast that lives inside
damn the pain and times you cried
no one cares of how you feel
Devil laughs and spins the wheel
Take another step and stumble
blindly stagger, trip and tumble
balance fades and all is lost
fall and pay a hellish cost
struggle to regain your feet
once again to feel complete
game is rigged, you'll never learn
Devil laughs, you crash and burn
L. Carling c2005
Copyright ©
Rakerman1999
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Re: Round and Round
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by PuppyChow on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 02:06:15 PM AEST
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| awesome!!!!!!gr8 job. luv it!!!! |
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Re: Round and Round
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by pixie on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 02:07:30 PM AEST
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brilliant writitng, is there any subject you can not write on??? ;lol I loved the last 2 lines in the last stanza I feel like he laughs at me sometimes, but now I am wiping that smile off his ugly face *hugs*
pix xx |
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Re: Round and Round
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 02:20:26 PM AEST
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| Liked this poem....great rhythm...hits home |
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Re: Round and Round
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 25th April 2005 @ 10:37:47 AM AEST
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| wow awsome write.Very refreshing to me. |
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Re: Round and Round
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by Silent-No-More on
Monday, 25th April 2005 @ 08:57:05 PM AEST
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It is perhaps not the best day for me to have read this... (I seem to be stumbling a lot lately).... but even still... the hopeless optomist in me is wanting to spout off about those last two lines. *smirks* I'll not do so, however... I'll just sit quietly, hoping that this was just a moment in time captured on the page. Captured well, I might add.
I like the pace of this one, Larry... it says as much, I think, as the words do.
Wishing good things for you (as always)
~SNM~
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Re: Round and Round
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by lovingcritters on
Tuesday, 26th April 2005 @ 03:42:57 PM AEST
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Hi there Mr. L. Carling,
My how I've missed you....you took flight about the same time as my computer did.
I'll bet you thought of me you'd never get rid!!!
BRAVO! BRAVO! BRAVO! YOU GREAT POET YOU.
Flowers at you feet I threw
Can you guess who these old lady is?
Warm love
Lovingcritters
ConSue
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Re: Round and Round
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by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 28th April 2005 @ 12:31:34 AM AEST
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Hmm interesting I liked the flow of this. It
was sort of a depressing thought with the
devil in control of course most of my poems
aren't to joyous either. Lol keep up the writing
bro and I hope you are doing will. I miss
talking to ya man.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Round and Round
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by vibes2go on
Thursday, 28th April 2005 @ 03:31:09 PM AEST
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I mentioned you and your book on my authors page ..
you're a brilliant poet ... and your poetry needs to be seen and read .. you need to expose yourself (please smile, or laugh ... my heart is breaking and I miss you. I know what you think of me; and perhaps you're right. I don't think so .. everything that I held dear is gone from me ..and what I need now is a damn good pillow fight..Someone wrote a poem ..for my limerick contest on the other site..used the word schlong ...LOL I thought for just a second .. but that was just me, getting my hopes up .. and dreaming .. Hope you and yours are doing well~ mary |
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Re: Round and Round
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 30th April 2005 @ 02:58:44 AM AEST
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hauntingly beautiful, as always larry; your pen is golden:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Round and Round
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by Archie on
Wednesday, 4th May 2005 @ 06:29:39 PM AEST
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| Awesome poetic touch. I have not read your work in a while. I think I have been missing out. |
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Re: Round and Round
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by ForeverAlone on
Sunday, 15th May 2005 @ 02:03:43 PM AEST
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Just like all your rest poetry this excells ing rhythmn and rhyme, just amazing as always, Im growing rather fond of your work.
~Clark ;] |
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Re: Round and Round
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by ruthie1983 on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 01:16:24 PM AEST
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| I like this poem. U did good job rhyming and expressing urself. Great work!! |
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Re: Round and Round
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by Channing on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 10:46:49 PM AEST
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| Awesome poem, with very good flow and rythm. |
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