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The Broken Song
Contributed by
blackmint_fairy
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Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 05:59:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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my broken wings are black and charred.
can't see the sky, the wind blows hard.
you kiss my tears, turn them to ice.
you broke my heart...
not once, but twice.
i want you back to breathe in me.
now cloudy skies are all i see.
my breath is short, my days are long.
and i am just...
a broken song.
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2005-04-24 17:59:55]
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Re: The Broken Song
(User Rating: 1 )
by breny on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 06:59:52 PM AEST
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this is very good. Your emotions stand out and it is well structured. You should try to write more because, to me, it sounds like you have more to say.
a well written poem
Good Job :-D
~Brenna~ |
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Re: The Broken Song
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by blackmint_fairy on
Monday, 25th April 2005 @ 08:10:50 PM AEST
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thanks alot :D
i have written alot more under a different username.
bruised_hands08 check it out
much love,
shelbie |
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Re: The Broken Song
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 25th April 2006 @ 09:51:39 PM AEST
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| This is a great poem! short but simple. i understand your situation, and you expressed it very well. GOOD JOB! |
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