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Overpowering Black Death
Contributed by
spazz911
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Tuesday, 26th April 2005 @ 08:12:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Walking alone on a concrete street
Empty to everyone, all except me
The skins of reality hang off every tree
Waves in the wind, for all else to see
Brutal and bloody, and dripping with hate
Knives in the ground, a screeching they make
Screams of forgiveness blow on without date
A plague of death enclosing the world
The burning of skin by the fire within
And locks on the doors, guarding our sins
No one is id left, streets gleaming with blood
Flooded by memories, surrounding us all
Remember the pain and the death in this smog
Its invading my mind in this blankness of black
Scenes swatching at me, there is no turning back
The feeling of pain that these memories bring
I hurt as I watch them, pulled on by a string
Continuous waiting, waiting to end
I had to return, to the road that holds them
To explore back in time, youd think a wondrous thing
But when you feel the darkness, as death closes in
There is no way but backwards, to travel forward unknown
I cant forget whats happened, the knife stabbed in my back
For it happened too much, too soon to bare
I wish never to walk these lonely streets again
And see the bloody signs all over again
Reality has hit us, now when I look back in time
The smog suffocates me slowly, the smog of Black Death
Darkness overpowers us, kills what strength there is left
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Re: Overpowering Black Death
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by ForeverAlone on
Tuesday, 26th April 2005 @ 08:23:10 PM AEST
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*Hard to read*
Make stanzas man...shorten them down and make them easy to read...yep..thats the only thing I didnt like about this...everything eles I liked alot..very chilling and dark..and powerful I might add...good job
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Re: Overpowering Black Death
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by hrpuffnstuff on
Tuesday, 26th April 2005 @ 09:03:37 PM AEST
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| i disagree i like it the way it is, stanzas would seperate it . it has great imagery and feeling as it is. i really love this one hxx |
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Re: Overpowering Black Death
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by blue_angel on
Tuesday, 26th April 2005 @ 09:27:25 PM AEST
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i liked it... but it reminded me a little too much of some of my poems! although i dont think u have it as bad as me... u still dont have it the easiest but easier than the lot of us. dont do nething stupid... like me. i did but i dont regret it... you would. trust me i know you. luv ya kc,
jennie *hugs* |
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