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It's Done
Contributed by
fielding88
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Wednesday, 27th April 2005 @ 04:10:02 PM in AEST
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I never thought Id see this day,
When nothing else was left to say.
The time has comethe time has gone,
And ill just have to carry on
Seasons change and so do I.
I let my feelings slowly die.
My love for you was meant to last,
But what we had is in the past.
The love I felt is still around
Has not been losthas not been found.
Returning when I speak your name,
But darling can you say the same?
Ill never love in the same way.
If love is the right word to say.
Youll never love me, like I you,
But I dont think Id want you to
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fielding88
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2005-04-27 16:10:02]
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Re: It's Done
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by breny on
Wednesday, 27th April 2005 @ 06:20:24 PM AEST
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Oh Marc this is cute. Yes I know how this feels. But something good will come out of your lost relationship. Something always does whether it's finding someone else (and from what i hear, already happened), learning something about yourself or just coming out of it with good memories. That;s the way I try to veiw my lost relationship. But i'm glad that you have moved on. Great write and brilliant show of emotions.
Wonderful write Marc!
Your friend
~Brenna~ |
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Re: It's Done
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by purplestary on
Wednesday, 27th April 2005 @ 06:39:10 PM AEST
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| i agree that this is a brilliant show of emotion. and i too relate to this felling alot. for some reason the last stanza speaks for me the most........amazing. |
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Re: It's Done
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 28th April 2005 @ 06:43:48 AM AEST
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I couldn't agree more with Brenna & Jarred.
I really thought this was well penned and i adore this poem.
Remind me to read more of your poem. Cause i think you're just fab.
Jane~ |
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Re: It's Done
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by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 28th April 2005 @ 03:11:29 PM AEST
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(Since it seems to have become pattern to agree with previous commentors on this poem)
I agree with Jarred, this has an excellent sense of closure. The rhyme and rhythm is well done (though, to be momentarily nit-picky, the first line of the last stanza doesn't fall into natural iambic beat like the others skilfully do). Well spoken emotions, and talented style. Bravo!
Andrew |
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Re: It's Done
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 29th April 2005 @ 10:41:16 PM AEST
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| without a doubt, the best poem i have seen by you thus far. very tasty also =] encore, encore! ::gets the hot sauce:: lol |
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Re: It's Done
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 08:12:22 PM AEST
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excellent, perfect in everyway, and lyrics flow like a beautiful song... hugs n' love nessa
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Re: It's Done
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 14th May 2005 @ 09:35:08 AM AEST
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Awsome flow!
And yes it sounds like you are learning one of lifes harder lessons. |
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Re: It's Done
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by xXcrossedXx on
Wednesday, 22nd June 2005 @ 07:09:17 AM AEST
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I'm going to cry! Thanks a lot! lol
This was another phenominal piece (my gosh how many times am I going to need to say that!? :) - i dont mind at all)
Anyway this was just outstanding the
"has not been lose-has not been found."
Is a real hard hitter! It sets the mood for the ending and is a great transitional line, the very last line:
"But I don't think I'd want you to..."
Is another hard hitter, you already knocked us off our feet in the beginning but you just stopped us down with those two lines.
Very powerful and moving write,
--amanda-- |
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