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The Story Of My Life
Contributed by
high_on_duct_tape
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Thursday, 28th April 2005 @ 04:20:58 PM in AEST
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I actually haven't cut in awhile, but...
Every day It's the same
As I play the game of life
I give up trying to win
And try to minimze the strife
I follow the motions
I do what I must
I try to have fun
I really do, It's just
How can I live
Meaningfully
Thinking about you
And hating me
I love you so much
If only you knew
I'm too young for this
But I'm ready, are you?
Why must this happen?
Why happen to me?
Why must I cut?
Why can't I be free?
At the end of the day
I crawl in my bed
I stare at my wrist
Throbbing ache in my head
As day becomes night
And night becomes day
And day become torture
I watch my life waste away
The story of my life
Craving what I'm missing
While I'm too busy trying
To get too busy living
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Re: The Story Of My Life
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by justme03 on
Thursday, 28th April 2005 @ 04:36:15 PM AEST
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Yo, AMEN lol
i been in like the exact place. your poem speaks what my life has been like lately and im 14 and life sure is hell.
im there 4 ya :)
hugs, ~kortnie~ |
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Re: The Story Of My Life
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by sick_n_twisted on
Thursday, 28th April 2005 @ 04:54:37 PM AEST
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| hi i loved ur poem this was just like my life but i sort of straightened it out well im trying i cant because the guy i loved moved away i know how you feel i crawl into bed saring at my wrists i hgate doing it but i do it anyway its like some kinda sick addiction. i just turned 14 i know how you feel if u ever need to talk message me i really loved your poem it would be a waste of talent if u ever stoped writting so keep it up c ya later Denise, |
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Re: The Story Of My Life
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by brew on
Thursday, 28th April 2005 @ 06:33:39 PM AEST
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I hate to give alot advice..But you are 13.I have a brother who is 14....DO not think love will end......it is love, but ya have to lose and lost to maybe have later.
Liked the write tho, excellent.......you sound older.
Brew~ |
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Re: The Story Of My Life
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Thursday, 28th April 2005 @ 07:14:09 PM AEST
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This was a very sad poem. but i dont
think anyone should cut themselves over
someone just my thought.. other then
that it is a good poem! |
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Re: The Story Of My Life
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by kitty_express2001 on
Thursday, 28th April 2005 @ 07:58:00 PM AEST
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| Im 14 female can we talk? ..... this is a very sad poem:( |
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Re: The Story Of My Life
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by bethie on
Friday, 29th April 2005 @ 01:09:25 PM AEST
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| Such profound sadness for a 13 year old. I feel sorry for kids today. |
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Re: The Story Of My Life
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by smiley_jennyxoxo on
Sunday, 1st May 2005 @ 11:44:28 AM AEST
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| That's such a sad poem. I'm 16. I can relate to it well. You shouldn't cut because of someone. I did one time, when he found out, he said I shouldn't cut if I care about him. I made him a promise to never cut. Look to the positive things in life, and you may feel better :D Jenny |
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Re: The Story Of My Life
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by Live2Die on
Thursday, 10th November 2005 @ 04:45:29 PM AEST
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| Aw shlomo. I really like it, but its so sad. And I just.........you guys are perfect for eachother. Only time will tell. |
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Re: The Story Of My Life
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by UnknownLegend on
Wednesday, 30th January 2008 @ 05:35:38 PM AEST
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| I read this poem ........ I really don't understand it except you are a victim of unrequited love. ????? I don't see the structure of this poem ...it's more like a cry for help with one liners. I sincerely think you ought to see a therapist if you are looking at your life so bleak at such a young age. You really must let go this obsession with this girl and then you can live. It's really unhealthy because I knew a boy just a few years older than you ,who like you, fixated on someone to the extent he took his own life. Problem is ....he called 911 when he changed his mind but it was too late. You started out in an attempt at rhyme and dropped in to a sort of prose. Me ...? I'm not a poet nor a critic but I know what i like to see in a poem ...... Read Lord Byron, When We two Parted if you want to read an eloquent write of lost love .....pay attention to the last lines and see how it ties in with the beginning. I could never achieve that ......but I'm not byron and neither are you. Try writing about fields, flowers, streams and the clouds ....... it's will make you happy. |
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Re: The Story Of My Life
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by Jenni_K on
Thursday, 17th April 2008 @ 06:30:19 AM AEST
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| I have to agree with legend..... You are too young to waste your life away.... actually at any age....a life is not worth taking over anyone.... Jenni |
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