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MAKE A STAND
Contributed by
Onslaught
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Sunday, 1st May 2005 @ 09:50:09 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Confronting evil
I make a stand
I may not win
But I make a stand
Seeking pleasure
A waste of energy
A diversion from intellect
Draining my soul
Until all power is gone from me
Those who only
Seek out pleasure
Are afraid to think
They only want to feel
Foolishly believing
That they are shaping their fate
I grasp for understanding
Beyond the realm
Of our common senses
These same old
Boring troubles
That plague humanity
Are wearing me down
This Life just isnt enough for me
But then again this life isnt so easy
Everything looks better
When youre up above it all
But when you see its all a lie
You have such a long way to fall
You dont really exist
If you never mean
What you say
Do you think that your god
Cant see
That you arent really sorry?
Not even we can know
If we ourselves are truly regretful
Everything we say
Everything we do
Wether or not
We are aware of it
Is decided
By our own selfish desires
Confronting evil
I make a stand
I may not win
But I make a stand
Copyright ©
Onslaught
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Re: MAKE A STAND
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by Essentially9 on
Sunday, 1st May 2005 @ 10:02:09 PM AEST
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| mike, this was very impressive on a conceptual and on a poetic level. not only do you have your conviction clearly shown; you are not a hypocrite with it as ive seen in others. i loved the fact that you used the beginning as your ending. this poem still has me in awe with your message and how well you have written it. i am glad i had the honor of reading this. |
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Re: MAKE A STAND
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by UnlovedChild on
Sunday, 1st May 2005 @ 10:21:49 PM AEST
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| Wow , this poem is more than amazing! I absolutely love it. |
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Re: MAKE A STAND
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by Archie on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 02:11:17 AM AEST
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| This is a good poem. I feel like that too sometimes |
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Re: MAKE A STAND
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by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 02:46:09 AM AEST
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Jeesh Mikey, this was just incredible.
Very well writen especialy the ending, i love this.
Jane~ |
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Re: MAKE A STAND
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by blue_angel on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 10:47:43 AM AEST
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amazing and incredibaly true. i use human weakness as an excuse to a lot of things, even though i know its not the true answer. i try to make a stand but in the end i always back down. if thats not human weakness then what is it exactly? just curious.
great write,
luv n hugs,
jennie* |
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Re: MAKE A STAND
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 04:18:58 PM AEST
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| Great write , very thought provoking , I think of the things i have done out of selfishness and hope to be forgiven. The last verse is inspiring, it makes me think of the children who are abused by evil and and heartless monsters. They need noble, kind hearted people to take a stand . |
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Re: MAKE A STAND
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by freckle on
Wednesday, 11th May 2005 @ 08:30:06 PM AEST
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Good one. I like the way the first verse repeats. Good points. Good write.
Carol |
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