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Past Regrets
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Tuesday, 3rd May 2005 @ 07:44:33 PM in AEST
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You scooped me up when I was fragile and broken
You put me at ease with your first words spoken
I didn't know how to react to such a gentle soul
I keep my feelings bottled up and so I write this little scroll
I want to say thank you and tell you it wasn't in vain
I wish I had another chance so I could just explain
I messed you up real good; I took you down with me
I didn't mean to hurt you, your intentions were so pure
Now I walk around with this burden that I feel I must endure
You attempted to ease my pain and lighten a bit of the load
I wonder would you have bothered if you knew the drama that would unfold?
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hauntedscorp
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2005-05-03 19:44:33]
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Re: Past Regrets
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by blue_angel on
Tuesday, 3rd May 2005 @ 08:08:01 PM AEST
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wow that is rilly good. i lik yer writing. im gonna reed summore!
luv n hugs,
jennie* |
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Re: Past Regrets
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by Nazmythian on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 03:07:14 AM AEST
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Funny thing the heart ... it's ability for compassion ... and it's ability to forgive. If it had the ability of foresight ... I would bet rather high odds that the ability to hope change is possible of or to forseen events, that yes they still would have bothered.
Nazmythian ~ |
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Re: Past Regrets
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 21st May 2005 @ 09:49:50 PM AEST
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| this was a very well written poem, but since this is a rhyme formatted poem, the fact that you had the line with me at the end not to rhyme with anything just stood out. another thing is instead of starting a new sentence with every verse, why not continue it every now and then like saying i messed you up real good, etc, and im sorry that i hurt you with this burden, etc. making the piece flow better in ways like that can make it seem better connected and better overall. ive noticed that sometimes even a change of words in one line can make a masterpiece. keep up the great writing scorp, and the past will only haunt you until you forgive yourself... |
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Re: Past Regrets
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 27th May 2005 @ 01:01:49 PM AEST
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| This is a really sweet apology scorp. Nice write! |
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Re: Past Regrets
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by yangdantien on
Tuesday, 20th February 2007 @ 12:42:35 PM AEST
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I like this as its intentions ring some of my own bells. What a sensitive soul to pen such an homage. I wonder does this hold up for the writer some 2 years later.
Peace
Yang |
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Re: Past Regrets
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by JamesStockdale on
Saturday, 10th March 2018 @ 02:22:03 AM AEST
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| A lovely heartfelt write. |
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