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Take the Blame
Contributed by
Nazmythian
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Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 12:48:19 AM in AEST
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( I hear this ... in a Linkin Park-ish sorta style )
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Strike a match ~ Light a flame
Feed the fire ~ Place the blame
Take a hold ~ Of my heart
It's been here right from the start
If you squeeze ~ You will see
There is nothing left of me
For you to put ~ Into place
Just the mem'ry of my face
( chorus 1 )
Long departed
Broken hearted
Fools of memory ~
Hang upon your walls
In silence
Right here next to me
In the dark(ness) ~ Of your mind
Turn around ~ You will find
You're alone ~ Once again
You refused to let me in
( chorus 1 )
Long departed
Broken hearted
Fools of memory ~
Hang upon your walls
In silence
Right here next to me
(chorus 2 )
Empty faces
Hollow gazes
Reflecting what it means ~
Shadows of the souls
You've wasted
Feeding on their dreams
( solo )
( bridge )
Dismembered memories
Casual ~ Casualties
Gin and catatonic
Toxified ~ Vacant eyes
(chorus 2 )
Empty faces
Hollow gazes
Reflecting what it means ~
Shadows of the souls
You've wasted
Feeding on their dreams
( chorus 1 )
Long departed
Broken hearted
Fools of memory ~
Hang upon your walls
In silence
Right here next to me
Strike a match ~ Light a flame
Feed the fire ~ Take the blame
( repeat and fade out )
Take the blame ~ Take the blame
Feed the fire ~ Feel the pain
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(P.S. Special thanks to Timebot for editorial help in pointing out my spelling errors ... see Jules ... I can be taught !!! LOL )
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Re: Take the Blame
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 12:51:44 AM AEST
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Interesting write. Small suggestion ...(pssssttt... it's "their") :-D
yeah, I can kinda hear the Linkin' Park in there too.
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Re: Take the Blame
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 12:59:50 AM AEST
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You know set to the right music and sung well this could be a hit.
My reasons for saying this is the repetitve nature and the expression behind the lyrics.
Both in my eyes a great combination for a great song.
I would seriously consider setting this to music(if you haven't already)
Good job.
johnny. |
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Re: Take the Blame
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by emystar on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 01:27:34 AM AEST
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A bit sad but definently a hit and deep write.
A masterpeice.
Long departed
Broken hearted
Fools of memory ~
Hang upon your walls
In silence
Right here next to me
this part really says it all.
Great work.
huggs,
emy
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Re: Take the Blame
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 01:31:54 AM AEST
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I'd buy the cd...sounds good. Pssst! By the way Timebot, it's THERE not THEIR!! lol
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Re: Take the Blame
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by the_Ghost_Moth on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 01:42:36 AM AEST
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Interesting vs/ch structure.
Seemed more plain spoken.
but read it a few times
and I like alot of the lines.
Stay cool.
--Ghosty
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Re: Take the Blame
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 01:45:30 AM AEST
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psssttt. scorp...
In "Feeding on their dreams", it indeed was *their* and was corrected before you saw it.
*sighs*
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Re: Take the Blame
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 01:51:50 AM AEST
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| Sorry Timebot, my bad. I thought you were referring to the line "There is nothing left of me...." My mistake. Scorp ; ) |
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Re: Take the Blame
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by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 01:56:24 AM AEST
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WOW and WOW
A true masterpiece Nazzy.
hugs |
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Re: Take the Blame
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by venkat on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 02:44:53 AM AEST
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| Excellent in all aspects. very impressive. venkat |
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Re: Take the Blame
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 03:28:05 AM AEST
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Nazz, you do know how to jazz it up. I love linkin park i could almost hear them singing this.
what a great lyrics to a song which im sure everyone will love and rock with for years to come.
Jane~ |
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Re: Take the Blame
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by lostinmyself on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 06:50:39 AM AEST
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I'm another who can hear Linkin Park in this.
I like this, Nazzy. Especially everything before the first chorus. I really love that.
Great write sweetie,
*hugs tons* Phil xxx |
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Re: Take the Blame
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 10:49:16 AM AEST
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Excellant musical write, which I agree could probably be very popular if it were published.
Although I can't sing and I don't know the melody, it still seems to have a great rhythum when I hum along.
Again, a great tribute to your versatility.
Will |
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Re: Take the Blame
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by freckle on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 11:15:01 AM AEST
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Cool Naz! I liked this one. I liked the following lines alot:
In the dark(ness) ~ Of your mind
Turn around ~ You will find
You're alone ~ Once again
You refused to let me in
Good write!
Carol |
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Re: Take the Blame
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 01:13:47 PM AEST
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| This is the melody I long to hear in music form, but will listen as the words play out a tempo on my screen. This is so beautiful, I could just sing it out loud, like the rhythm is already been put to these words. Thank you for this tuneful inspiration! Joni |
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Re: Take the Blame
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by lovingcritters on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 08:01:59 PM AEST
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All that's missing now is the music, and you MUST set this with music. It would a big hit for sure. Where do you get these thoughts, Naz, do they just float into your head and take over? I really liked it.
And thank you again Naz for all you nice comments on my poems.
They are appreciated very much.
Keep up the good work!
Warm Lo ve
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Re: Take the Blame
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by FleurdeSang on
Friday, 6th May 2005 @ 03:23:59 PM AEST
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*bows to Nazzy* You are a God, I swear!! Reasons why:
A) I LOVE Linkin Park!!!!!!!
B) You are an impeccable writer!!!
C) You're just cool!
lol. Three deeply thought-out and intriguing reasons, no?? lol. Exquisite! Sad, melancholic, harsh, defiant, lots of anger, and in your face! LOVE ITTTTT!!!!! OMG, I can't stand it, it's so good!! lol. Thank you sooooo much for sharing this magnificent piece with us, Nazzy! You never fail to make a masterpiece. All my love. Forever,
Your eternal friend and fan,
Stephy! ~*petite fleur*~ LOVE IT! *rocks out!* |
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Re: Take the Blame
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by fielding88 on
Sunday, 8th May 2005 @ 02:26:23 PM AEST
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This was really strong, with many lines holding such deep meaning and hitting me quite hard. I bet if I showed this to one of my friends (who's an LP fanatic) he would think that he somehow missed one of their songs. It does indeed resemble some of their stuff, and I could hear the yelling the areas you've emboldened, lol. The structure is quite intricate, but I just read it surprisingly fast. It just flowed at times, and I love the attention you've payed to making this one. Excellent work man!
Now all you gotta do is sell it... |
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