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Overcoming this sickness
Contributed by
Shishke_Bob
on
Friday, 6th May 2005 @ 10:45:30 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Overcoming this sickness
I cant take this pain any longer
I just wish it would go away
The emptiness that I feel will drive me mad
I dont know how much longer it will last
So, I will make it end myself.
My skin is so pale
I look like Im already dead
I dont know what my mother will say
God, I hope she wont be frightened
Sammy, are you feeling better?
The bowl shattered on the ground as the door opened
We saw the red that covered the floor
The sight was agonizing to behold
As it flooded the doorway, we could do nothing
It was too late and it couldnt be undone
The thick pasty-like red substance
Was reflecting our stares of astonishment
And I looked up at my mother and frowned
As she knelt down to wipe up the mess
When she was done she stood up.
Oh Sammy I am sorry I know you arent feeling good
And asked for this awhile ago Ill go make you another one
Dont worry we have plenty of Campbells.
And I chuckled as she went out the door and down the stares
That our conversation was ended with tomato soup.
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Re: Overcoming this sickness
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by sicknivesevered on
Friday, 6th May 2005 @ 02:28:18 PM AEST
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| Ah, that was kind of funny. Good write. (^_^)v |
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Re: Overcoming this sickness
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by MorningDove on
Friday, 6th May 2005 @ 08:26:40 PM AEST
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From fatal to funny. Hilarious. I love works like this. Comedy is apparently your venue.
Dove |
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Re: Overcoming this sickness
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by Wachumiri on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 06:14:46 PM AEST
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New prospective... ok, it was funny. I hope you enjoy writing these as much as I enjoy reading them.
Take care.
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Re: Overcoming this sickness
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by PoeticLicense on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 06:24:21 PM AEST
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| Well, I must say, this poem was about as tasteless as tomato soup from a can. I'm going to praise the inventiveness, for it was really quite clever, but let's not quite call that a wholehearted endorsement. Keep writing. |
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Re: Overcoming this sickness
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 21st May 2005 @ 10:15:22 PM AEST
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Hehehehehehe..... I love it
The best way to cheer yourself is to cheer somebody else up
Write on my friend
~~~Michelle~~~ |
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Re: Overcoming this sickness
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by emystar on
Thursday, 25th August 2005 @ 01:16:13 AM AEST
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U had me with this one. I thought this was about cutting. i'm happy it was just tomatoe soup.
Good work.
huggs,
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