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You Sure About This?
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Friday, 6th May 2005 @ 05:08:35 PM in AEST
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Sorry for the burden I've asked you to bear
I know the opportunity to be loved like this is usually quite rare
Often times the situation looks bleak;
if you'll just sit still and afford me to speak
I wanna ask you questions like; "What is it in me that you find unique?"
I wanna tell you so many things, but I do not dare
such as when you're asleep I sit and stare...
and when I think of losing you my heart starts to tear
My heart bleeds with remorse everytime I lash out at you;
and yes, my dear, don't I know---there's been more than a few
but PLEASE tell me why I deserve this happiness;
you know I really don't understand...
this just couldn't POSSIBLY have been in god's plan
Trials and tribulations are all that I know
and this tough, brave front is purely for show
Stick with me and I might poison you too
and force you to swallow my lethal brew...
I love you for now, but will it last,
or will I kiss you goodbye with a venomous blast?
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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2005-05-06 17:08:35]
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Re: You Sure About This?
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by jyssvw22 on
Friday, 6th May 2005 @ 06:30:22 PM AEST
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| nice!...for me, i felt this was so many times...you love some one so much you figure you will just end up hurting them..very cool write. |
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Re: You Sure About This?
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by MorningDove on
Friday, 6th May 2005 @ 08:08:06 PM AEST
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I have to agree with Jarred. This sounds so uncannily familiar. I won't name the poet you write like, but it is the same sad, my life has been hell, and i will destroy you along with me theme. Well written, just like it is almost a clone. Good work.
Dove |
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Re: You Sure About This?
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 6th May 2005 @ 10:47:42 PM AEST
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Well written, and wonderfully expressed. Such intensity, great write!!!!
Leia
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Re: You Sure About This?
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by mina-1 on
Saturday, 7th May 2005 @ 08:39:47 AM AEST
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An awesome write so very well portrayed. Outstanding and so unique in style. Well done
*hugs*
~sue~ |
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Re: You Sure About This?
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 8th May 2005 @ 02:34:36 PM AEST
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| Beautiful...Beautiful...Beautiful...I sure can re-late to this..Keep up the wonderful work..~~~Michelle~~~ |
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Re: You Sure About This?
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 10th June 2005 @ 09:41:26 AM AEST
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Wow. Very talented impressive, ***expressive***, and exquisite writing. Really, I am very impressed.
"I wanna tell you so many things, but I do not dare
such as when you're asleep I sit and stare..."
Again, such similarites in people's lives.
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