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Silent Screams
Contributed by
sprinter27
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Saturday, 7th May 2005 @ 09:23:49 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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She is screaming loudly
But all is silent
No noise is heard
Everything is deadly quiet
Her screaming is beginning to cease
Shes bringing it to an end
No one can hear her silent screams
Not even her best friend
She is beginning to swallow her screams
Even if it results in her own death
Her live has been stolen
Her friends are head of this theft
Shes losing herself to life
She screams are now full of pain
Her loss has become
Someone elses gain
She is crying out
But no one can hear
She has no friends to listen
That is her one and only fear
She screams
While friends smile
No one can hear her at all
Its been like that for a while
In her head are all her screams
Her friends hear not a word
Calling out to her friends,
They hear not a word
Shes beginning to fade
Slowly leaving this world
She knows when shes not wanted
Locked away from this world
Her friends neglect her
And her screams
They are there for her
Only in her dreams
So she says goodbye
And slowly, begins to die
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Re: Silent Screams
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 09:46:41 PM AEST
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ah, very impressive. i really liked this one you had excellent rhyme for the most part. you rhymed word with word and didnt rhyme in one place, that is all i remember. (nothing slips by the rhyme freak), as i forgot to minchin, your rhyme in time to go, was very well done also. your ending was kind of ordinary to me, and i think that for the last line it could have have been "So she says goodbye"
Before she screams her last lies (of loving life). keep up the excellent writing. |
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Re: Silent Screams
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by Jaycee on
Monday, 16th May 2005 @ 09:21:48 PM AEST
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This is a very touching and sad poem. There is such a string sense of despair and abandonment. Of not being heard, of everyone deserting her. I so hope this is not exactly how your life is going. The whole poem is so powerful but these verses:
She’s beginning to fade
Slowly leaving this world
She knows when she’s not wanted
Locked away from this world
Her friends neglect her
And her screams
They are there for her
Only in her dreams
Are so terribly sad. I hope your life gets better and soon.
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