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The Lonely Broken Heart
Contributed by
Essentially9
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Sunday, 8th May 2005 @ 08:21:32 PM in AEST
Topic:
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The Lonely Broken Heart
The coldness
Of my loneliness
Starts to freeze within
In the unconsecrated sin.
The blood drops evaporate
With an end to my pain
For just today.
The tears just glisten
As they consummate sin
In lasting bitterness.
Yet, the coldness
Doesn't freeze my loneliness
In the tears of happiness;
It freezes my heart of bitterness.
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Re: The Lonely Broken Heart
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by spazz911 on
Sunday, 8th May 2005 @ 08:24:30 PM AEST
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awsome poem, i love the ryhming perfect amount, not overdone at all, well keep it up
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Re: The Lonely Broken Heart
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by ForeverAlone on
Sunday, 8th May 2005 @ 08:28:06 PM AEST
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Jen...*sigh*...do I really need say anything about this???....As always ;]
~Clark |
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Re: The Lonely Broken Heart
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by shelby on
Sunday, 8th May 2005 @ 08:31:50 PM AEST
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you did it to me again Im hooked inside your words
Michelle |
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Re: The Lonely Broken Heart
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by sprinter27 on
Sunday, 8th May 2005 @ 08:33:26 PM AEST
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great poem. i like it a lot. keep up the good work!
~sprints |
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Re: The Lonely Broken Heart
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by heartquake on
Sunday, 8th May 2005 @ 08:37:13 PM AEST
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| I liked it... to me it sounds like a poem about the after thoughts of suicide... how someone would have been happy to do it for one reason or another but then thought they shouldn't have but it was too late and they died before they could have a nervous breakdown about it... but thats just what i got from it... I just like looking deeper into a poem than whats just written... |
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Re: The Lonely Broken Heart
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 8th May 2005 @ 08:48:12 PM AEST
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| Saying so much in so few words, yet still holding back...Really good job. Scorp. |
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Re: The Lonely Broken Heart
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 8th May 2005 @ 08:48:15 PM AEST
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| This was a very good poem, essentially 9, do you remember me? You commented on a few of my poems on my old name, if you want to know......... |
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Re: The Lonely Broken Heart
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by mina-1 on
Sunday, 8th May 2005 @ 11:34:06 PM AEST
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Jen a remarkable write with so much more behind the lines. Your writing is so unique in style. So little words used, but alot said. Still I think there is more to it.
*hugs*
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Re: The Lonely Broken Heart
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by venkat on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 05:43:19 AM AEST
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| Aaah what a cold feeling...:-) venkat |
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Re: The Lonely Broken Heart
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by DorianChambers on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 08:32:43 AM AEST
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Poetry well crafted and yet very human in it's
depiction of the hunger posessed by the one
who crafted it, your heart is showing . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: The Lonely Broken Heart
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by fielding88 on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 05:44:49 PM AEST
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| Don't like the cold? It's my favorite time of year--when it's cold--and i think the cold does that same thing to me. It's not that it stops me from being lonely, but rather keeps me from being bitter. This reminds me so, so, so much of the first poem that I ever wrote. Not in style or simplicity, though, but rather simply subject matter. Words cannot describe how much i enjoyed this one, and I love it that much more each time I re-read it. I have nothing more to say except that it was excellent and tasted divine : P |
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