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Liasions of the heart...
Contributed by
mina-1
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Thursday, 12th May 2005 @ 08:05:54 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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'Twas once assumed I was ordained to sadness Temptations of the heart Virtually led me to madness
Everything I proceeded to do Was always done wrong My heart shadowed by darkness 'Twas like to hell I belonged
For the echoes of an elegy Play over and over in my ear The tormenting dreaded voice That lulls for me to hear
Your attempt to seduce my heart Shall fade away slowly then diminish Courted by a forgotten empty soul Your choosen path an ominous finish
Liasions of the heart Can no longer occur Painful wounds lay open Leaving my heart's vision a blur
Endeavours with a new love Washes stealth from this blackened heart The elegy that once played in the shadows Now lulls an empty tune of the past.
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Re: Liasions of the heart...
(User Rating: 1 ) by EverlastingDawn on
Thursday, 12th May 2005 @ 08:13:30 AM AEST (User
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Beautiful poem, absolutely stunning
I hope things get better for you
Great Write
~Dawn |
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Re: Liasions of the heart...
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jenni_K on
Thursday, 12th May 2005 @ 08:18:45 AM AEST (User
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Excellent write, Sue.....
Hope all is well with you..
hugs
Jenni |
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Re: Liasions of the heart...
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 12th May 2005 @ 08:45:43 AM AEST (User
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Beautiful Write..I Love It...
Hope you find that sprit to cure the
sadness in your heart..Ty for sharing.
~~~Michelle~~~ |
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Re: Liasions of the heart...
(User Rating: 1 ) by SPSM on
Thursday, 12th May 2005 @ 08:53:17 AM AEST (User
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Wishing you peace from your sadness. Good write. |
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Re: Liasions of the heart...
(User Rating: 1 ) by pixie on
Thursday, 12th May 2005 @ 09:20:03 AM AEST (User
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such brilliant and emotionally beautiful writitng :)
take care
pix xx |
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Re: Liasions of the heart...
(User Rating: 1 ) by MorningDove on
Thursday, 12th May 2005 @ 11:13:08 AM AEST (User
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Splendid work, Sue. I have been there and it is an empty desolate place. Wishing you love and happiness in the sunshine.
Peace,
Rita |
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Re: Liasions of the heart...
(User Rating: 1 ) by In_a_while on
Thursday, 12th May 2005 @ 11:19:07 AM AEST (User
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Very well worded sadness. I'm glad you shared this work of art for everyone to see. i look forward to more.. keep up the excellent work. |
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Re: Liasions of the heart...
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 12th May 2005 @ 11:49:30 AM AEST (User
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This is so sad, and we can all relate to this pain that we endure for the sake of love. Sure hope life is looking better for you. In some way it gives us all hope in a new day! ~joni~ |
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Re: Liasions of the heart...
(User Rating: 1 ) by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 12th May 2005 @ 01:28:49 PM AEST (User
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Its sad yet beautiful.
awsome |
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Re: Liasions of the heart...
(User Rating: 1 ) by sride686 on
Thursday, 12th May 2005 @ 02:02:55 PM AEST (User
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Well Sue this write was really good and a different step from most of your love poetry. This is more my style but don’t let yourself continue writing this way. I hope everything is going okay with you and your Man. If you need anything know I’m here for you as you are always here for me. This write was sad and caught me of guard after so many writes of love. But like always this write was worded very well with a great choice of vocabulary. Your words always cut to the heart and I thank you for sharing. Thank you again for the beautiful write you wrote for me and my comrades. Take care my friend….Steve |
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Re: Liasions of the heart...
(User Rating: 1 ) by DorianChambers on
Thursday, 12th May 2005 @ 04:25:16 PM AEST (User
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A beautiful poem of awakining 2 a new love . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Liasions of the heart...
(User Rating: 1 ) by jmpy84 on
Thursday, 12th May 2005 @ 05:18:51 PM AEST (User
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wonderfully written sue |
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Re: Liasions of the heart...
(User Rating: 1 ) by Man_On_High on
Thursday, 12th May 2005 @ 09:35:34 PM AEST (User
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brilliant!
very well written...
I loved every single word...
M.O.H. |
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Re: Liasions of the heart...
(User Rating: 1 ) by loveisendless on
Thursday, 12th May 2005 @ 09:36:49 PM AEST (User
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To hell with people who don't know what true love is all about! You had enuuf of his crap,& told him to take his love & shove it!! Brave little lady with a big heart,baby you gotta end the bad before the good can start!!! That you did & I'm so proud,my heart now beats for you nice & loud!!!! Great poem & a great acheivement!!!!!
Lots Of Love,
DAN!!!!!! |
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Re: Liasions of the heart...
(User Rating: 1 ) by ladyfawn on
Friday, 13th May 2005 @ 02:24:32 AM AEST (User
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lost in the past but looking ahead hopeful, excellent poem! hugs n' love, nessa
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Re: Liasions of the heart...
(User Rating: 1 ) by sweetangeluk on
Friday, 13th May 2005 @ 03:48:55 PM AEST (User
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Time heals. This was so beautifully written
I love it word for word
One of your best
Love Angelxxx |
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Re: Liasions of the heart...
(User Rating: 1 ) by lovingcritters on
Friday, 13th May 2005 @ 06:29:24 PM AEST (User
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My dear sweet Sue,
The past is the past my dear, and live it right there in the past. No one can live their lives while peering over their shoulder all the time. You will stumble and miss out on everything ahead of you.
This poem was so honest, sad, open, and very revealing. I hope you are all right. If not please let me know maybe I can help you.
And thank you do much for commenting on my every poem.
Warm love
consuemom |
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Re: Liasions of the heart...
(User Rating: 1 ) by Vermillion on
Friday, 13th May 2005 @ 06:42:21 PM AEST (User
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absolutley brilliant. one of the much more poetic poems ive read in a long time
keep it up!
~vermillion~ |
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Re: Liasions of the heart...
(User Rating: 1 ) by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 13th May 2005 @ 06:44:33 PM AEST (User
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Beautiful and meaningful words. May your heart begin to hear a new song.
Blessings.
Andrew |
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Re: Liasions of the heart...
(User Rating: 1 ) by ForeverAlone on
Sunday, 15th May 2005 @ 12:05:50 AM AEST (User
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Wow..this is an excelent write sue, I really liked the last staza in this, Great Job
~Clark |
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Re: Liasions of the heart...
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 12:33:58 PM AEST (User
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I'm beginning to notice there are more sad songs than happy on the internet. This is one, but beautfully done and I hope things have changed for you by now. This one moved me. J. |
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