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Tears hit the Ground
Contributed by
In_a_While
on
Friday, 13th May 2005 @ 12:26:24 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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i'm alone as i see, birds flapping at me
leaves blow by while not trying to die.. yet they're already torn.
So i sit for awhile, not wanting to smile
till clouds make no sounds...and no tears hit the ground.
in this place of no soul, moon shines through a hole
and lights up the night for a smoke...you alone too?
wind blows through my hair, disturbing despair
my lips can't speak cause i'm cold...should i go home?
who's on my side, besides birds that have died?
is there hope at the end of a rope?...my halo hopes so
who all believes, that hearts are the leaves
that autumn brings to remind you of winter...a white blanket buries.
i'm tired...so...
i'll settle into sand, letting seas understand
that i couldn't swim from the start...neither could my heart.
so i'll paint some more birds, and write some more words
so you can all see me alive...til the next rising sky.
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In_a_While
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Re: Tears hit the Ground
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 13th May 2005 @ 12:36:15 PM AEST
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beautiful expression of feelings, and i love your last stanza:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Tears hit the Ground
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by mina-1 on
Friday, 13th May 2005 @ 05:45:43 PM AEST
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A remarkable piece of poetry outlining ur struggle in this life. Hang tuff dear friend. It shall soon pass. I'm here 4 u if ya need a friend ok. I can so much relate to ur poem. Writing with so much emotion and depth. A great write. Keep 'em coming. take care.
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Re: Tears hit the Ground
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by sride686 on
Sunday, 15th May 2005 @ 02:53:00 PM AEST
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Well my friend this is a very good write and a great choice of words that really mad this poem flow wonderfully. You know you always have a friend here just hit me up if you need anything. Take care and I look forward to more of your writes. This was well read and much enjoyed….Steve
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