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A Love So Deep
Contributed by
Jaycee
on
Saturday, 14th May 2005 @ 01:02:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Woke up this morning
with her on my mind
Oh I am fixated
on this woman so kind
She is so unavailable
we must be platonic
Given how I yearn for her
this thinking's moronic
I've forgotten to eat
my thirst I don't slake
of her I do dream
both asleep and awake
My breathing goes ragged
my body's on fire
She's all that I want
Consumed by desire
She's not mine to want
She's not mine to keep
But that cannot extinguish
these feeelings so deep
The chemistry's been there
oh, right from the start
I fear she's imprinted
her name on my heart
How I yearn to hold her
and kiss her so much
Our fingers lightly brushing
a feather soft touch
I was dead before I met her
a shell of a man
I can never go back
before this began
and held in my arms
is where she wants to be
Know this to be true
but it just cannot be
My honor is my life
so I must continue to cry
Desire just one kiss
then so ready to die
Copyright ©
Jaycee
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2005-05-14 13:02:00]
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Re: A Love So Deep
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by Jenni_K on
Saturday, 14th May 2005 @ 01:29:50 PM AEST
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I'd say you did real fine, Jaycee.... and doing just great I must add. Thank you my friend...
I don't think there's any need to cry tho....lol..
Hugs
Crazy Jenni |
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Re: A Love So Deep
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by MorningDove on
Saturday, 14th May 2005 @ 02:50:28 PM AEST
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Well, I think you did splendid. Maybe love and romance is your venue to show off your talent. Splendid piece.
Rita |
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Re: A Love So Deep
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by hollyc-state on
Saturday, 14th May 2005 @ 03:32:30 PM AEST
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| Your first poem like that huh??? I would not have guessed. It was touching, yet soft and very well written. Thanks for sharing. : ) |
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Re: A Love So Deep
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by shelby on
Saturday, 14th May 2005 @ 05:11:42 PM AEST
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a pleasure to read light and airy flowing with romance I enjoy someone who shows me their heart in their words
Michelle |
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Re: A Love So Deep
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by Stellar on
Saturday, 14th May 2005 @ 08:02:18 PM AEST
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Very nicely done. Those kinds of feelings can be dangerous. But that's probably what draws us to them in the first place.
Keep up the great writing!
Take care
Stellar |
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Re: A Love So Deep
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by Man_On_High on
Saturday, 14th May 2005 @ 09:27:49 PM AEST
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ya found ur calling..
awesome flow,
a tragedy in romance...
I say go after her anyway you can!!
M.O.H.
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Re: A Love So Deep
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 14th May 2005 @ 11:18:31 PM AEST
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Jaycee,
Very romantic and beautifully written!!
Leia
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Re: A Love So Deep
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by blue_angel on
Monday, 16th May 2005 @ 10:27:19 AM AEST
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thats a great poem... i rilly like it. so much passion and emotion in it, like really heart felt. its a beautiful piece, i hope u can werk things out,
luv n hugs,
jennie* |
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Re: A Love So Deep
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by CloakedMystery on
Monday, 16th May 2005 @ 02:04:32 PM AEST
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AWWWW!!!!!!!!! i love it!!!!!! although it needs a little work its stilll really good! i could never write like you or any of the other ppl on ypdc....
LaterZ! |
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Re: A Love So Deep
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by CloakedMystery on
Monday, 16th May 2005 @ 02:05:44 PM AEST
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AWWWW!!!!!!!!! i love it!!!!!! although it needs a little work its stilll really good! i could never write like you or any of the other ppl on ypdc....
LaterZ! |
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