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Embrace The End
Contributed by
ForeverAlone
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Saturday, 14th May 2005 @ 09:11:32 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Embrace The End
The shadow eclipse the nothingness that surrounds
The wisper echos throughout in silence
The regret fills your lungs, soon you drowned
As a mear martyr for your alliance
Bleeding ears tremble from the screams
The boastful words announced to the world around
Your eyes fill with tears, as they shatter your dreams
And a taste of rust in your mouth, from the lies unwound
The meaningless words grow bitter and cold
Your world cames crashing down, as every truth is actually a lie
Books upon books and scriptures to hold
As you close your eyes for very the last time
. . .
Embrace the End
And the darkness that towers
For there is no golden ladder to climb
. . .
And if there turns out to be a god
He aint a god of mine
Hes a god of cowards
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ForeverAlone
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Re: Embrace The End
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by Zeldianus on
Saturday, 14th May 2005 @ 09:15:25 PM AEST
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| this is astounding!! Loved every bit of it |
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Re: Embrace The End
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by spazz911 on
Saturday, 14th May 2005 @ 09:16:21 PM AEST
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| i love this poem it is incredible really, i love what it means its truth and originality |
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Re: Embrace The End
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by sprinter27 on
Saturday, 14th May 2005 @ 09:17:36 PM AEST
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good write. i like it, it has a lot of power. keep up the good work.
~sprints |
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Re: Embrace The End
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 14th May 2005 @ 09:26:37 PM AEST
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| very good write. i liked this one alot because it was written a different way than you normally do it, and it worked very well. your beginning was fantastic and it only got better except for the last line. i cant really say that i liked the ending line. basically everyone that is born is a coward. |
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Re: Embrace The End
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by Brians_Sweety on
Saturday, 14th May 2005 @ 09:40:11 PM AEST
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| If you wouldn't have put the horrible last line this poem would have been awesome. It is very pwerful. I am just sorry you look at me as a coward, when really I'm stronger than you because I do have God. |
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Re: Embrace The End
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by RejectionOfConformity on
Sunday, 15th May 2005 @ 12:30:36 AM AEST
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| Very, very, anti-religious. I don't believe in 'God' so I can agree with your poem. It is very good by the way. |
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Re: Embrace The End
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by mina-1 on
Sunday, 15th May 2005 @ 05:56:10 AM AEST
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Clark this is a real thought provoking piece of poetry. A real eye opener. A great poem, except for the last line my dear friend. I can understand why u wrote it. Overall a remarkable write.
*hugs*
~sue~
PS wishing that u would just change the last line, hey it's just my opinion ok. Take care my friend. |
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Re: Embrace The End
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by Rakerman1999 on
Sunday, 15th May 2005 @ 03:32:02 PM AEST
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Poetry is meant to be an expression of the mind and soul of the writer. You did that and then some here. I've never read your work before and must say that this is an excellent bit of writing. I may not agree with your last line, but it is that very line that sets off the rest of this poem and makes it as powerful as it is.
Very well done my friend
Barkeep!!
Larry |
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Re: Embrace The End
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by OnAngelswings on
Tuesday, 17th May 2005 @ 10:06:14 PM AEST
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| well, you are a very strong writter...this is very good...I don't agree with your ending but it fits this poem well...Everyone is entitled to their own beliefs...wrong or right....Shari :) |
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Re: Embrace The End
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by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 9th June 2005 @ 12:56:44 AM AEST
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Loved this although I thought it could've done
without the last stanza. With the exception of
those last three lines I can definitely relate to
it it is sort of how I am feeling now although I
obviously can't put it half as eloquently or
poetically as you just did. Loved it I think I'll go
read it again.
Bobo (Joel) |
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