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daddy it wouldnt stop
Contributed by
bruised_angel
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Tuesday, 17th May 2005 @ 02:59:22 PM in AEST
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"daddy it wouldnt stop"
sobbing his little girl sat on the floor
he turn to see what see meant
there was blood on the door
he looked at her hands
they were dyed the same red
"sshh wheres mommy"
she stopped crying putting her hands to her head
"shes in there"
"shes asleep on the bed"
he open the bedroom door
there was his wife not asleep but dead
her wraist's were cut
she'd taken her own life
and laying next to her was her murderer
the black stainless steel kitchen knife
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2005-05-17 14:59:22]
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Re: daddy it wouldnt stop
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by Fears on
Tuesday, 17th May 2005 @ 05:53:40 PM AEST
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| that was really good and scary....especcialy to think that things like that happen everyday...if this happened to you then I am really sorry...and if it didnt then....you are very imaginitive. |
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Re: daddy it wouldnt stop
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by blue_angel on
Tuesday, 17th May 2005 @ 08:23:08 PM AEST
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omg this is such an amazing poem... like one of my favorites on this site. sad, yes very... but also very VERY good. i LOVE the rythm it has... its awesome great job.
luv n hugs,
jennie* |
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Re: daddy it wouldnt stop
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Wednesday, 18th May 2005 @ 11:58:25 AM AEST
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This to me is a masterpiece. This was very well expressed and deep. I thought it was a excellent poem. It was scary but really good. Great job.
Blessed be
christina |
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Re: daddy it wouldnt stop
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by Fears on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 10:42:00 PM AEST
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| Ah, I just cant get over this poem..i read it everyday and everyday I feel different emotions. I love it and I am glad that you wrote and posted this for many eyes to see! |
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Re: daddy it wouldnt stop
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by Sinned on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 05:11:13 PM AEST
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Brusied_angel
Excelence
Sinned |
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Re: daddy it wouldnt stop
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by Noelia on
Friday, 29th July 2005 @ 02:13:50 PM AEST
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| Hey, I think ur poem is really good!! |
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