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The thoughts
Contributed by
nomie
on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 08:36:30 AM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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Orange eyes, yellow pain,
blue fingers, bloodied stain,
rotating memory, frustrating sting,
intensive care, embracing wing,
holding on, letting go,
wind without air, stars without glow,
impending death, lost hopes,
apocolyptic world, fraying ropes,
consistent effort, unpaid work,
Owed compassion, corrupted clerk,
injustice complete, objectionable defence,
Shameful actions, regreted past tense,
constant adversity, everlasting hurt,
A broken down heart, a soul to revert,
Roses now wilt, kisses without lips,
Dreams now shatter, adventures without trips,
Tangerine skies, black and white rain,
Still she lingers, in muddied disdain.
Copyright ©
nomie
... [
2005-05-19 08:36:30]
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Re: The thoughts
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by SPSM on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 08:51:25 AM AEST
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| If this was quickly thought up, I have to go read your other ones. This conveys every emotion I'm sure all of us have felt. Great! SharonM |
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Re: The thoughts
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by deathdrop on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 10:30:31 AM AEST
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wow!
this is mazing stuff here!
good one!
keep it u c'oz i'd love to see more of your poems!!! |
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Re: The thoughts
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 09:17:11 PM AEST
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Hey, This is a wonderful piece of poetry, I loved the unique words that you said instead of saying some everyday boring words! I loved it all! I really liked this line
wind without air, stars without glow,
That is so orginal! well GOOD WRITE, oh and thank you for the comment on " Will anything ever change??" |
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Re: The thoughts
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 23rd May 2005 @ 06:27:44 PM AEST
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| Very powerful. I think that i have felt all those feelings or at least almost all of them. You have expressed exactly how I feel and put them into words when all I can do is basically cry and have my hert feel like's its been torn. I really enjoyed reading this. Thanks for writing this. |
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