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She Brought me Pain
Contributed by
sride686
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Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 12:57:52 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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My tears fall and they fall from pain
My eyes are burning and its driving me insane
I hurt so bad I can barely breath
But what is the reason I have all this grief
I let her come in and she touched my soul
I gave her my life and I gave her control
And what did she do she took my soul
She cut out my heart and proved me a fool
Now Im left to think of her and I
Why cant she go and just leave my mind
These thoughts hurt and they cut to my spine
Now in life Im lost to all man kind
From all this pain Ive died inside
Ill never love again and I can see thee end
And for me the end is death
For in my life I have nothing left
So now Im saying goodbye
This will be the last of all I write
So now read these words girl
And know my love was true and only meant for you
Now true love will you never find
For in your mind youll be lost to mine
So forever will you dream
Only of this love you shared with me
Copyright ©
sride686
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2005-05-19 12:57:52]
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Re: She Brought me Pain
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 02:01:31 PM AEST
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great write very emotional.
This was a very touching write
I loved how you expressed every idea.
The imagery and lost love.
Lost love is very hard. i know i could say oh hang in there, and i will, but it just seems like nothing matters after the love of your life is gone like no ones words can help. Like a part of you left with them.
Hang in there, your somwhere your not supposed to be for reasons unknown
stay strong.
keep writing
keep smiling
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Re: She Brought me Pain
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by In_a_while on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 02:18:06 PM AEST
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| This was a very strong write with lots of loss and hurt. It's amazing to see your output of poems stay strong, i'm glad to see and read it. I'm especially taken by the last stanza, very unforgiving and straight to the heart of the matter. i applaud you. dw |
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Re: She Brought me Pain
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by mina-1 on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 05:12:29 PM AEST
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Steve your talent in writing shines through your work. You write with so much depth and feeling. Your skilled ability to capture ur emotions are absolutely remarkable.
This is a sad and very emotional piece of poetry that hits straight at the heart. You never cease to amaze me my dear friend. With each and every write you convey heartfelt emotions into them. Your poetry is remarkable as always and deeply touches the heart.
Take care my friend.
*hugs*
~sue~
5 big loving stars 4 u |
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