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Within This Skin
Contributed by
blue_angel
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Saturday, 21st May 2005 @ 07:28:07 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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There is a happiness
Within this skin
There is a soul blessed
Within this skin
There is a pure love
Within this skin
There from above
Within this skin
There is a fire
Within this skin
There is desire
Within this skin
There is a girl
Within this skin
There is a world
Within this skin
There is a stream
Within this skin
Carries a dream
Within this skin
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2005-05-21 19:28:07]
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Re: Within This Skin
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by TheVoice on
Saturday, 21st May 2005 @ 10:08:18 PM AEST
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This is a great piece, I am upset you do not have more comments on it.
The Voice
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Re: Within This Skin
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by MorningDove on
Saturday, 21st May 2005 @ 11:37:28 PM AEST
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I am delighted to know that you know, feel and see the beauty of the universe inside you. While so many are wasting valuable time in their lives trying to be miserable, you have been given wisdom and strength that is rare in youth today. Feel the love of the universe and let the spirit inside you reach out in life to touch others. This is brilliant.
Peace,
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Re: Within This Skin
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by sride686 on
Sunday, 22nd May 2005 @ 11:38:18 AM AEST
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A good write and with a great escape for all your pain. I hope you got a lot out as it sounds like you did. You write great work and I’m glad I take the time to read when I have the time. Keep up the great art my friend and keep the dream alive that the end speaks of. your friend….Steve
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Re: Within This Skin
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by Jaycee on
Sunday, 22nd May 2005 @ 05:11:27 PM AEST
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| I really like how you did the repetitive rhythm with the "within this skin"; rolls beautifully. Like the message, to, of this special girl with her dream. Voice is right, deserves lots more comments. |
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