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Nothing
Contributed by
spazz911
on
Saturday, 21st May 2005 @ 09:21:19 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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No person, no status,
No beauty, few foes,
singing the greens
the moments I know
No person to hold me
No singing of songs
but I'll play by the rules
I'll keep my shirts on
No comments or questions
No answers for me
trying to be the person
that only I can be
No love, some support
No hope, lifes disheartened
thinking of past moments
and wishing waiting forgotten
No praying or eagles
No hearts beat as one
I'm having a scolding
I'll try whats wrong
Nothing, Nobody,
noone who cares
I feel so abandoned
A dusty old chair
Copyright ©
spazz911
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2005-05-21 21:21:19]
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Re: Nothing
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by emystar on
Saturday, 21st May 2005 @ 10:11:09 PM AEST
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Dad gummit spazz u know we care!
dwell on the positive side of things then your life will be better.
If u r down there's only up to go.
Please get up, my friend.
luv, huggs,
prayers,
emy |
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Re: Nothing
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by blue_angel on
Sunday, 22nd May 2005 @ 09:27:09 PM AEST
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duh kc we care. hello? r u even paying attention to how much u worry me? god... i cant stand it wen u say no one cares... but of course i get the impression ur talking about the opposite sex... yea sry cant help ya there thats your fight.
luv ya,
jennie* |
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Re: Nothing
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 22nd November 2005 @ 07:50:17 AM AEST
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| nice work |
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Re: Nothing
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by jh64 on
Wednesday, 28th June 2006 @ 03:21:22 PM AEST
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| singing the greens the moments I know. That is my favorite line. Can see the sorrow and how down you are. If you can concentrate lines like that throughout the rest it could make this very powerful. I see promise in this but I also if nothing is done a poem that could have been made stronger but just wasn't. Hope you consider my words as suggestion to improve not as a way to insult. |
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