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AfterGlow
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 09:03:03 PM in AEST
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A haunting melody once played tugging at heartstrings
Two lovers frolicking in bed; testing out bedsprings
hands held tight, dreams unfold
warmth seeped in where once was cold
how one inspires they'll never know;
a random sequence of stop and go
Echoes of a child filled with wonder
in the distance a rainbow threatens thunder
somewhere right now a snowflake drops,
and somewhere else still, some champagne pops
Curled up on your side of the bed
lay the answers that flood your head
running on empty a car chugs along
a tank full of hope will never steer you wrong
Feverishly reaching is a lovers grasp
somewhat surprised and excited, she lets out a gasp
how love fills a void some will never know
is it merely directed by ones arrow?
One casts their thoughts in the sands of time
another slowly descends from their orgasmic climb
A flash flood of innocence run amok
paddling in ideas that lightening struck
A ring bearing a promise of truths not told
marvelling in the mystery that will soon unfold....
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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Re: AfterGlow
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by jyssvw22 on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 09:22:36 PM AEST
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well done...well done
great write, |
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Re: AfterGlow
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by MorningDove on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 09:28:50 PM AEST
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Hope, wishes, random thoughts and optimism are what keep us living life everyday. I think a cynical, jaded, less than happy person fails at most of the things they try to do because they set themselves up for it, where an optimistic person thinks they will succeed so they strive harder too and generally do. JMHO. But I have seen it happen so much in life.
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 10:04:04 PM AEST
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terric write loved the way this flowed and it made one think as you were reading it it pulled me into it I like that
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Re: AfterGlow
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by Skinney86 on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 10:13:12 PM AEST
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| Great Great, i love how you express whats on your mind and are able to compare it with objects in nature! GREAT! |
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Re: AfterGlow
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 11:29:58 PM AEST
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Great write !!!very well written and full of passion
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Re: AfterGlow
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 01:12:55 AM AEST
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Aaaaaah makes great sense to me.
A masterpeice that rocks.
huggs,
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Re: AfterGlow
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by mina-1 on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 07:38:14 AM AEST
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You go girl. This is an absolute stunner. Makes heaps of sense to me. Captivating from start to finish. Ur talent in writing is incredible. Well done,
*hugs*
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Re: AfterGlow
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by blowfish_jane on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 08:57:23 AM AEST
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A very creative write. I must say i enjoyed it alot. Keep writing and i'll keep reading.
Jane xx |
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Re: AfterGlow
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 11:57:12 AM AEST
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One word, excellent. great write. It was well written and worded just right. Great job
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Re: AfterGlow
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 03:10:10 PM AEST
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Seemingly random, yet feelings of life and love are so very strong in this piece.
Well done scorp!!!! |
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Re: AfterGlow
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by reflections on
Thursday, 26th May 2005 @ 06:48:29 AM AEST
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It does make sense. Each thought compliments the other, and each reflection invites the next. A series of concepts that utilize the talent of one who understands life, and is willing to share it’s beauty with others. Great job.
John
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Re: AfterGlow
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by sweetangeluk on
Friday, 27th May 2005 @ 06:18:22 PM AEST
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Made perfect sense.
Very cleverly crafted thoughts
Unique and excellent write
Love Angelxxxx |
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Re: AfterGlow
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by mylastwords on
Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 01:17:09 AM AEST
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this is an awsum poem, i really love it. its really different!
xxooxx mylastwords xxooxx |
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Re: AfterGlow
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by Dorkfish on
Friday, 10th June 2005 @ 10:53:45 AM AEST
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| Very Passionate and again another excellent poem. I love your work! |
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Re: AfterGlow
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 02:39:01 AM AEST
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Wishing that I could write like you
These thoughts may I share with my love I hold true?
You melting away would be a tragedy and my sorrow
So hoping to see more from you tomorrow
Absolutely love your imagination and the imagery in this one, Scorp.
Never stop. Would love to share this one with you know who. :)
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Re: AfterGlow
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by secretwind on
Saturday, 23rd July 2005 @ 12:39:32 AM AEST
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| sweet Innervision |
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Re: AfterGlow
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by Alibi on
Saturday, 3rd September 2005 @ 12:15:04 AM AEST
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| Exquisite hauntedscorp! Just exquisite!! Now I know why this is so wildly popular! How very very positive, and full of love. Wonderful! I only wish this was a recent poem, you seem to have a big heart. May love bless you soon. |
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Re: AfterGlow
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by LostAmbition on
Saturday, 3rd September 2005 @ 12:43:38 AM AEST
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Heh the title got my attention you could say ;P
NOt what i thought it would be about.
Still very good and different too. Original.
You have talent keep em coming:D
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Re: AfterGlow
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by candysears on
Wednesday, 7th September 2005 @ 05:19:11 PM AEST
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You are blessed with a great talent.
God Bless |
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Re: AfterGlow
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by Maxximus on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 05:21:25 PM AEST
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| marvelous... excellent imagry and flow. Keep up the good work! |
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Re: AfterGlow
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by MrJeans on
Sunday, 9th October 2005 @ 10:31:32 PM AEST
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Now thats cool! Flooded my head with good stuff
Mr. |
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Re: AfterGlow
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by VampryssCherry on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 09:44:24 PM AEST
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| I have to say, every word of it made sense. It's the random thoughts that come out the best, or so I've come to find out. Great work, awesome! |
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Re: AfterGlow
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by zealousnatalie on
Friday, 28th October 2005 @ 01:13:59 PM AEST
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"A ring bearing a promise of truths not told
marvelling in the mystery that will soon unfold..."
This makes one realize your conflicting views, yet the overwhelming sensuality, the fervor, the optimism and even doubt brings about a plethora of feelings!
This is very thought provoking! |
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Re: AfterGlow
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by Gothchyk on
Wednesday, 2nd November 2005 @ 08:22:04 PM AEST
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| i loved this poem, you tie your random thoughts together very well, great write. |
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Re: AfterGlow
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by classicfailedhero on
Thursday, 17th November 2005 @ 04:06:50 AM AEST
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this is like the only poem that i've even liked on this site, keep up the great work
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Re: AfterGlow
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by MuCho_AmOr on
Tuesday, 7th March 2006 @ 06:19:12 PM AEST
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| That was really something great. |
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Re: AfterGlow
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 20th March 2006 @ 08:19:25 PM AEST
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| I'm not sure if this is abstract, but its good, regardless. Admittedly, it is hard for me appreciate poetry that Ryhmes. I probably would have liked this more if it weren't for that. |
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Re: AfterGlow
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by ek_da_poet on
Thursday, 20th April 2006 @ 10:06:33 PM AEST
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| i like it alot keep it up pe@ce |
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Re: AfterGlow
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 3rd February 2007 @ 05:35:24 PM AEST
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| I really liked this poem. kewep writing! |
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Re: AfterGlow
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by Voyager on
Tuesday, 11th May 2010 @ 09:40:00 PM AEST
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| 'Fantastic! Your description of every minute thought and emotion is brilliant. You should try your hand at Novels. |
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by voyage on
Thursday, 22nd July 2010 @ 11:21:15 AM AEST
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| very passionate and full of warmth. |
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Re: AfterGlow
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 20th May 2014 @ 09:01:12 PM AEST
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absolutely beautiful, sweet, loving, and gracefully
classy, a masterpiece of blooming romance and
love, true poetry at its finest, such vividly wonderful
imagery all around:)
hugs n' love nessa
@->>->>---- |
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Re: AfterGlow
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Sunday, 12th October 2014 @ 02:23:17 AM AEST
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A ring bearing a promise of truths not told
marveling in the mystery that will soon unfold....
I loved these last two lines. I have always been a sucker for good openings and grand conclusions. very good
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Re: AfterGlow
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 14th October 2014 @ 01:33:27 AM AEST
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is it merely directed by ones arrow? Crap, there's that damn arrow again messing with people's lives!!!
Wow, it's been so long since I've read this it didn't register as something like, "Oh I remember this one!" It was like reading something brand new. A very very nice piece of work here and ***** fire *****!!!...more than thirty comments? Wowness be yours! |
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