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Veins of Tears
Contributed by
Essentially9
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Friday, 27th May 2005 @ 07:56:15 PM in AEST
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Veins of Tears
The glass is beautiful with my blood
Splattered abstractly on the fragments.
Still, the glass has not cut me deep enough
To shed the sadness of the happiness that went
Too far out of my reach.
Today still isn't my day to live.
All of these dreams will never be
Anything, but the thoughtlessness I give.
Nothing matters to me
When I'm still purposeless.
I grasp for the hope that will be
Able to save me from my sickness,
And it still isn't there.
I'm here wasting away
Waiting for reasons to care
About living for just another day.
I still see insignificance
Staring back at me in the glass
That has a tear stained resemblance
Of what I never had in my wasted past.
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Re: Veins of Tears
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by ForeverAlone on
Friday, 27th May 2005 @ 08:11:49 PM AEST
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Pure Beauty Jen, this is certantly one of my favorites from you, the last stanza is perfect, awesome lil sis, as always, Another amazing write with your brilliance splattered all across the page.
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Re: Veins of Tears
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by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 27th May 2005 @ 08:37:43 PM AEST
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This is a very well written piece Jen...You really got your emotions across in this one. "Still, the glass has not cut me deep enough to shed the sadness of the happiness that went..." Haunting....truly.
Nice job. Scorp. |
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Re: Veins of Tears
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 27th May 2005 @ 08:45:24 PM AEST
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I love the way you have expressed yor emotions here, not just in a verbal sense, you have made this poem very visual with your words, right from the opening 2 lines.
Superb writing.
Johnny. |
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Re: Veins of Tears
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 27th May 2005 @ 09:58:06 PM AEST
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| I got such a clear and beautiful image painted by your words. Such a deeply emotional piece written so perfectly. |
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Re: Veins of Tears
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by lovingcritters on
Friday, 27th May 2005 @ 10:19:29 PM AEST
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Beautifui write, but without hope....it takes hope to really go on, have you none?
Someone something to give you hope I know it would help some.
Have you really no reasons to care? What about you? That's a great one reason for sure!
Warm love and hugs to you and a better day
Consue |
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Re: Veins of Tears
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 27th May 2005 @ 11:52:38 PM AEST
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Loved it! The poetry in the first and last lines
and just the blunt description of your pain in
the middle stanzas really made the write
stand out in my opinion. I can really relate to
the last two lines in the first stanza and it is
comforting to know that you never cut
yourself... I hope it stays that way. Keep up
yer awesome writing.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Veins of Tears
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by MorningDove on
Saturday, 28th May 2005 @ 01:32:27 AM AEST
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You imagery is brilliant and your hopelessness shines through like a beacon. My dear, insignificant you are not. You are a shining star in the world and you shine beautifully and boldly through your work. Never give up. One day your life will be illuminated and you will gaze in wonder at the beauty you have been missing.
Rita |
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Re: Veins of Tears
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by blowfish_jane on
Saturday, 28th May 2005 @ 03:39:36 AM AEST
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This was really remarkable Jen. You do write beautiful poems with amazing imagery behind every piece.
This was just perfection.
P.S. Love the title of the poem.
Jane xxx |
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Re: Veins of Tears
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by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 28th May 2005 @ 04:58:48 AM AEST
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| wow i can't begin to tell you how awsome this piece is to me.All i can say is wow, |
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Re: Veins of Tears
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by pixie on
Saturday, 28th May 2005 @ 09:00:25 AM AEST
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amazing, visual and deep, a really good emotional write,
Pix xx |
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Re: Veins of Tears
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by DorianChambers on
Saturday, 28th May 2005 @ 12:20:52 PM AEST
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As always your poetry is a joy 2 read, one
can't help but 2 be touch by it in some way,
i know i am . . .
Ben
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Re: Veins of Tears
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by xXcrossedXx on
Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 08:46:29 AM AEST
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Creative write pain and beauty all at once, I love the last two lines.
--amanda-- |
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Re: Veins of Tears
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by hardrocker15198916 on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 12:16:14 AM AEST
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wow
you are one of my favorite poets on this site
i absolutly love your work
i can relate to this one.
--> Rae |
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Re: Veins of Tears
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by hardrocker15198916 on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 12:16:26 AM AEST
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wow
you are one of my favorite poets on this site
i absolutly love your work
i can relate to this one.
--> Rae |
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Re: Veins of Tears
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by hardrocker15198916 on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 12:16:30 AM AEST
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wow
you are one of my favorite poets on this site
i absolutly love your work
i can relate to this one.
--> Rae |
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Re: Veins of Tears
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by hoist1atca on
Saturday, 28th January 2006 @ 12:36:03 AM AEST
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A gift for all-
No one is insignificant-
Your tallent is vital to all that you have touched-
Joe |
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