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you suffocate me on summer nights when im with out you
Contributed by
bttrflynajar
on
Sunday, 29th May 2005 @ 11:21:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
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i cant help it
every second
of everyday
thoughts of your eyes
they'll always stay
your lips i can taste
these memories i'll never forget
i will not waste them
but i'll continue to let them live
on
your killing me when im with out you
when will i see you again?
cant get you out of my head
and im in ecstasy knowing
i'll see you again
its what i want
its what i wait for
its you
your eyes and your lips
the feeling of your fingertips
over my hips
its you
singing to me
your all that i see
let me get out of myself
so i can see you better...
its you that i trust
so much more than this lust
and you....
and me...
im in love
and i hate it
because you suffocate me
when im with out you...
this love...
Impossible to Kill
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2005-05-29 23:21:14]
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Re: you suffocate me on summer nights when im with out you
(User Rating: 1 )
by Doriens_Picture on
Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 12:36:27 AM AEST
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this is such a great write
it remindes me of how i feel when im inlove
i think the title could have been shorter but alot of my poems have that problem too
i think i would have liked something like
Nightly Suffecation or Suffecating in Summer Nights
but its a good poem none the less and its not lessend really |
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Re: you suffocate me on summer nights when im with out you
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by Xbxg32000 on
Sunday, 4th December 2005 @ 09:20:26 PM AEST
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| This is a nice poem. I like the way you wrote this, and how you seem to analyze yourself within the poem. I like how you seem to show how you came to your current state, and what led you to it. The ending is very nice, as it ties up the entire poem flawlessly. Good job! |
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