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Entrapement
Contributed by
Versigh
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Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 07:48:54 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Your lack of openness is what takes me undermyself
I've cut myself worrying over you.
I'll ask you what's wrong.
And you'll shove me in a clear box to watch.
I still worry even though I can't do anything.
My heart and mind are still alive.
I'm still thinking about your problems,
wanting to help and wondering what will happen.
I won't loose you, I can't.
I slice my wrists and bleed to get a reaction from you.
You go all tall and silent.
My chest tightens and the compartment around me compresses.
I still want you, and I constantly wonder why.
I know, it's because I care, it's because I love you.
I know your watching me.
Can you feel my pain?
I can feel yours dear, and it's killing me.
How can you just stand out there and watch me die?
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Versigh
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2005-05-30 19:48:54]
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Re: Entrapement
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by Scarlett on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 03:23:12 AM AEST
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very powerful with good images. particularly liked;
"you'll shove me in a clear box to watch"
and
"You go all tall and silent."
i can relate to some of this. full of emotion and strong words. well expressed! |
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Re: Entrapement
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by injectionxinfection on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 06:48:10 PM AEST
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| I love your use of words. Sorry it's been so long since you posted the comment(s) on my poem(s) but yeah i havent visited this site in ages. But i really like the way you ended it, it kind of made the poem for me, because well... i've felt it. Wow i sound so lame saying "yeah i feel the same" haha... its exactly what you expect. but whatever lol basically i mean to say that its a good poem ^_^ |
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