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Don't Wake Me
Contributed by
Essentially9
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Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 09:11:26 PM in AEST
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Don't Wake Me
Such is the art from a dream
Of a setting sun so wistful
Against the blue sea
That it's beautiful.
Yet, the dream comes to an end
When the sky wakes to find
The darkest night when
The stars only shine.
The sea reflects the light
That the sky gives
So that sunshine
No longer lives.
The sun has died
Along with the dream,
Yet the moon now has life
In the waves of the mourning sea.
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Re: Don't Wake Me
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by ForeverAlone on
Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 09:19:50 PM AEST
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so jen...hrm..i wonder, wait, i know why yopu felt to write....this.....awesome..to impress me right... yeah right..lol...great job as always...such talent jen, BTW i am a broken record... ;]]
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Re: Don't Wake Me
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 11:58:20 PM AEST
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wow Jen i am impress.
all i can say is wow. |
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Re: Don't Wake Me
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by Jimmato on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 12:59:29 AM AEST
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I like this one.
esp
"In the waves of the mourning sea." |
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Re: Don't Wake Me
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by DorianChambers on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 01:32:23 AM AEST
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This was quite a peice of writting full of deep
emotions and hidden meanings, verry nice
poetry jenn . . .
Ben
aka. Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Don't Wake Me
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by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 06:25:41 AM AEST
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Beautifully done....dreamlike......
Jenni |
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Re: Don't Wake Me
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by blowfish_jane on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 09:53:02 AM AEST
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Ohh i like this, it seems i like everything you write (Not fair j/k).
This was good in a dreamy way.
Jane xx |
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Re: Don't Wake Me
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by Willofree on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 10:16:01 PM AEST
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Facinating write, Jen. "The art coming from the dream...." ... and the dream dies with darkness"? Not sure about. Then there seems to be a dying and rebirth...in life without the dream, perhaps reality.
Very intriguing, well done
Will
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Re: Don't Wake Me
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by freckle on
Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 09:49:11 PM AEST
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I like the last two lines the best. Interesting write.... muy bueno.
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Re: Don't Wake Me
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 25th July 2005 @ 03:56:50 PM AEST
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Wow and you say you're not big on imagery??? This is fantastically visual and oozing with emotion. I love the mournful tone to this...Every stanza is quite great in it's own right, but something about that last one...it really lingers...Great job Jen.
Scorp. |
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Re: Don't Wake Me
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by fielding88 on
Wednesday, 19th October 2005 @ 11:00:05 PM AEST
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| Now this is some good poetry. What wonderful imagery, and water is always one awesome source for the best kind of imagery, too. I mean, there's so much to love about this poem, and that mourning sea at the end seemed to capture all the romanticism in this poem, and that reflection stuff in the second stanza was pretty ingenious, and I'm just plain glad I read this. Great stuff!!! |
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