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Answering Machine
Contributed by
hooray_its_jen
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Wednesday, 1st June 2005 @ 08:34:05 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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It doesn't matter anymore,
It's the ending.
It's the answering machine when I call my best friend's number
After a day of forced smiles
And a night filled with tears.
It doesn't matter anymore,
Because he...
He turned away when I needed it to be the
Beginning.
"Hi, we're not here right now."
I guess you never were.
Where's the beginning?
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2005-06-01 20:34:05]
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Re: Answering Machine
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by MorningDove on
Wednesday, 1st June 2005 @ 09:17:30 PM AEST
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wow, jen, with everything in your life right now, that must really hurt.
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Re: Answering Machine
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 01:53:19 AM AEST
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Aww *hugs* you. This was so heart breaking Jen. Im so sorry your freinds did this to you.
Your better of without them. you always have us right? LOL.
Hugs,
Jane xxx |
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Re: Answering Machine
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 02:00:52 AM AEST
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This has a lot of well-expressed emotion in it. However, I would've liked it a little bit better if you had the ending as "I guess you never were..." I think that would've made a more powerful statement, but I enjoed it nonetheless.
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Re: Answering Machine
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by twisted_dreams on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 08:13:55 AM AEST
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This is a very great write. . packed with emotion. I'm sorry for the friends taht did this to you.
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