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Lost in Love
Contributed by
sride686
on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 10:52:43 AM in AEST
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Love is perfect
When your in my arms
But when were apart
Your love can do harm
For you question our future
And forget out past
You forget our love
That could forever last
Why when I leave
Do I have to cry
Why do I fear
That youll walk out of my life
My heart was complete
When I found your love
You told me you loved me
And would never run
But now youve gone
And youve walked away
You ripped out my heart
And left me in pain
My heart is hurt
When I see your name
Why did your love
Have to drive me insane
Now youve returned
For a second chance
To take my love
For a second dance
Like a killer at night
Youve returned to your prey
To rip out its heart
And taste its pain
You drain my life
As you make me bleed
Then rip out my heart
To make yours complete
But like a fool
Im lost in a trance
Why must your love
Always make me dance
I hear your voice
And I cant say NO!
You control my thoughts
When I try and go
My life is torn
And in pieces I fall
With hate in my life
Ive lost it all
So true love
Ill never find
For Im lost to this love
Written in this rime
Lost to a love
that will never be true
As Im lost in my heart
To only think of you
But if youve lost your heart
Then youve lost your soul
So my life was taken
And now my future is to
~Steve~
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sride686
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2005-06-02 10:52:43]
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Re: Lost in Love
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by In_a_while on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 11:16:48 AM AEST
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A very well written poem of loss and heartache. I can't stand the feeling of heartbreak but it's a part of life and love. thanks for sharing it ... and take care
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Re: Lost in Love
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by suicidal_imbecile on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 11:19:55 AM AEST
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was it true love is she doesnt love you the same as you do? the worst is when your in love with somebody who doesnt love you. You know first hand dont you? I wish i could give you a big hug right now
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Re: Lost in Love
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by seci on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 11:47:34 AM AEST
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i am truly in luv with this poem. it is beautiful and believe it or not,but i like because it remains me of a stage i was in and kept getting in. keep writing because i look forward into reading more of your poems
luv seci |
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Re: Lost in Love
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by ruthie1983 on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 12:05:58 PM AEST
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| I totally agree wit the rest of other people comment, love hurts sometimes. just remember you are in control. |
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Re: Lost in Love
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by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 12:40:04 PM AEST
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Yes love really hurts and i say it suck when you fall in love and that person didn't feel the same.awsome write my friend.
hugs |
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Re: Lost in Love
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by Jenni_K on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 01:28:41 PM AEST
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What a heart-breaking poem!! It ain't always easy, is it!! Best of luck.
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Re: Lost in Love
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 02:47:09 PM AEST
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Wow Steve beautiful writing
I see the pain in your heart and
I can relate to it alot...
You never forget the hurt,
I pray you find the strength to get threw this..
sending you a hug {{{{{{ }}}}}}}}
~~~Michelle~~~
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Re: Lost in Love
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by MorningDove on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 04:43:12 PM AEST
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We all get hurt sometime. I would think fighting a war (literally) would be enough to fight in your life without having to worry about an errant lover. Don't be her puppet. If she won't be true to you while you are gone, she won't when you get back either.
Rita |
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Re: Lost in Love
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by KayeRains on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 04:44:53 PM AEST
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| I feel like you have a good poem at heart here, impacted with feeling... The poem needs some structure. You've mixed perfect rhymes with imperfect rhymes and sometimes you don't rhyme at all. Work on the meter. Good luck with this and with your heartache. Adieu |
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Re: Lost in Love
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by Shishke_Bob on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 09:16:34 PM AEST
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this was a very moving poem this one made my heart fell for you too. (I will pray for you.) the subject matter is a difficult one to write about but being able to shows that you are geting better, I do hope that you wont let yourself be hurt any more, even though love is the only thing wouth being hurt for but its still the most painful.if its ment to be then you will find a way to make it work. Be well
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Re: Lost in Love
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by blue_angel on
Friday, 3rd June 2005 @ 10:34:48 AM AEST
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oh steve, thats so sad! so heartfelt and painful. love burns.... it burns.
My life is torn
And in pieces I fall
With hate in my life
I’ve lost it all
idk why but these lines rilly stick out to me. thats a good thing lol. great write, sad tho. hope you find happiness,
luv n hugs always,
jennie* xXx |
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Re: Lost in Love
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by bethers_is_my_baby on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 09:11:11 AM AEST
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awwwwwwww this is definatly one of my favs from u! i know exactly how u feel here!:( its a great poem:) keep up tha good work:)
*~peace and love~*
*Always*
~Amanda Hope~ |
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Re: Lost in Love
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by Dorkfish on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 02:18:12 PM AEST
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| That was one of the best one son this whole site! You are awesome! Good work, I felt your pain and feelings. You have amazing talent. Keep 'em comin'! |
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