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Hidden in dark corners
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 04:54:41 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Darkness walked close by with daylight,
Throwing shadows all over the world.
To cover up one hidden corner,
Wherein hid a lone little girl.
She hugged her knees in the darkness,
Trying to push out the light,
Her tears became her companion,
To show her that it was alright.
She shook in the grey of the morning,
Fearing the time they could see,
The walls that had crumbled around her,
Revealing her misery,
She couldn't find strength in her being,
After hiding behind all the night,
She had lost touch with faith in the darkness,
And shied away from morning's light.
Nothing could save her from feeling,
Her tears gave her help from the pain,
The morning was way too revealing,
The darkness had hidden the stain.
She prayed to be colder than freezing,
To somehow put pain to an end,
But she knew that it wasn't the answer,
So she tried hard not to pretend.
She wept for someone to hold her,
But prayed for people to leave,
To go without looking behind them,
So she would not have to grieve.
Just curl up in her dark little corner,
And wish the stars all to sleep,
So she could breathe in her home full of darkness,
With her tears keeping her company.
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Re: Hidden in dark corners
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by shelby on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 05:00:36 PM AEST
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I have chills and tears all mixing together right now. your soul and heart reach out throughout this write a very moving piece of you shared so honestly
Im here if you need me
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Re: Hidden in dark corners
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by MorningDove on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 05:04:44 PM AEST
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Sounds like you are at the bottom. Can you find some way to start climbing back u? Philly, you must do it yourself, sweety. We can all assure you we love you, which we do. We can assure you things will be fine in time, and they will if you make them so. Like Chelle,I am here if you need me.
Hugs,
Rita
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Re: Hidden in dark corners
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by xXx_Fem_Fatale_xXx on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 05:31:24 PM AEST
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Sweety, there is light after darkness how ever unlikely that may seem at this point.
Stay strong and only focus on the good things in your life. Embrace yourself with all that is good and sincere.
A very touching poem, heartbreaking really. No one should have to endure so much pain in life.
huggsss,
Nats
" God only gives you as much as you can handle and each time he gives you a lil more to make you stronger for due life "
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Re: Hidden in dark corners
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 07:09:16 PM AEST
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I really like this poem, as sad and tragic as it is. It seems to depict a young girl feeling helpless and terrified, and perhaps shamed. The theme seems, to me, to center on her ambiguity about facing anybody. That's where you use the metaphor of dark and light so effectively.
Excellant poem
Will |
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Re: Hidden in dark corners
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by DorianChambers on
Friday, 3rd June 2005 @ 01:42:23 AM AEST
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Whats 2 understand, a quietly magnificent
peice of pain filled poetry, and of course, it's
beautifully done 2 perfection . . .
Benedetto John Papa Sr.
((((Phill))))
aka. Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Hidden in dark corners
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by venkat on
Friday, 3rd June 2005 @ 01:53:04 AM AEST
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| The sadness hidden in each line touches the heart..Dear lady..hope a better tomorrow, Darkness does not stay for ever..:-)venkat |
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Re: Hidden in dark corners
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by blowfish_jane on
Friday, 3rd June 2005 @ 03:13:36 PM AEST
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Well what can i say, you are truely one amazing writer Phil. This was just "WOW!!".
Sorry if i lack words right now, but i honestly think your great.
Hugs,
Jane xx |
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Re: Hidden in dark corners
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 07:44:50 AM AEST
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Philly,
I know it's a tough time.
Please remember we are here for you. The pain doesn't always go away, but I promise you, it will become at least bareble.
Remember the love.
Phil
( and yes I know thet wasn't really a comment about the poem itself....tough.. ;) )
HUG |
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Re: Hidden in dark corners
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by Fionndruinne on
Tuesday, 7th June 2005 @ 06:43:01 PM AEST
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very eloquent and graceful, even though it is sad, and weary too, it seems. I think life gives us this feeling sometimes. I've felt a bit of it, perhaps, and heard it from other lips, but seldom as understood as it is here. I don't think life's hardness will keep you down, my friend.
Well, I might not be making a whole lot of sense here. This is a truly good piece of poetry, and has depth of emotion as well as very refined and skillful structure.
Take care, my friend.
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Re: Hidden in dark corners
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by lovingcritters on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 04:12:41 PM AEST
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Bless your sweet little heart. If someone were to ask to describe this poem of yours in one word it would be Indecisiveness. And when you are indecisive, you are like the waves of the sea, first you are up, and then you are down. You must make up your mind dear, either or or! This always helped me find
my true self once again. Even if it's wrong, try it, but come to some conclusion, don't stay hid in your corner just wondering what to do. Jump from the shadows and just DO IT!!!
Extraordinary Write.........I felt every emotion possible. I'm so sorry and all I can do is hug you through my computer, but please know I love you, and so do many many others.
Warm love
consue
And thanking you
once again for all your wonderful comments
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Re: Hidden in dark corners
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by LoveStruck_Hippie on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 10:05:56 PM AEST
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So many can be touched by this write, each one taking a little something different away with them. For me it touches the places in my heart ,mind, and soul that reel from recent events in my life.
Keep writting this touched me at my core.
Shannon |
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Re: Hidden in dark corners
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 11:51:18 PM AEST
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| philly this was a masterpiece. i felt you captured every essense of this exceptionally, though that may be a bad thing seeing as how its a personal write and all that entails. i could go on and on about this poem, but it would only echo what you already know about your talent. |
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Re: Hidden in dark corners
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by deadheadpoet on
Thursday, 31st August 2006 @ 08:30:47 PM AEST
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I've been looking over your poems, Phil there are too many good ones to choose from. This one made me cry. You write with so much emotion...raw emotion. Love ya, hun.
Peace and hugs, Laura |
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