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Hand Of Love
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Saturday, 4th June 2005 @ 06:40:01 PM in AEST
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Woke up this morning beside my Sunshine
fell asleep to whispers of "You'll always be mine"
you held me tight so I dare not move
yesterday I made you mad again---I need to improve
I don't recall looking his way, but you said I did
I'm so sorry for hurting you; I deserve this black eyelid
We were walking hand in hand, everything going great
then one false move and it's me you berate
You left me there on the sidewalk; head down in shame
I know I've upset you again, I'm fully to blame
walk back to the house, you yank open the door
everything goes black, I wake up on the floor
You scoop me up in your arms and smooth my hair
whisper in my ear you love me and will always be there
I apologize again and thank you for giving me another try
I'm so thankful and lucky to have you as my guy
You cooked a nice dinner made especially for me
I said no thanks cause I wasn't really hungry
you pushed my face into my plate, then punched me in the jaw
out cold for a little bit, woke up; it was your face I saw
you were deep inside of me whispering words of love
with fear, but forgiveness I met your eyes above
you kissed me crudely on my now swollen lips
then with a final thrust you grab me by the hips
once you're done you tell me to get in the shower
I do, and when I come out, on the bed lays a flower
you lay me down on the bed and hug me tight
kissing me on the ear and uttering goodnight
Woke up this morning beside my Sunshine.....
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Re: Hand Of Love
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by MorningDove on
Saturday, 4th June 2005 @ 06:46:13 PM AEST
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Scorp, if this is true, get the hell out of here now. He is going to kill you eventually with just the wrong punch in just the right place. The human body is not made for beating. I a serious about what I am saying to you. Go to a Women's shelter, a friends, or live in a cardboard box, but get out of there now. Please.
Rita |
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Re: Hand Of Love
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by MorningDove on
Saturday, 4th June 2005 @ 06:47:19 PM AEST
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Sorry (oops) just saw the past tense up there. Embarassed.
Rita |
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Re: Hand Of Love
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by DorianChambers on
Saturday, 4th June 2005 @ 06:51:13 PM AEST
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((((((((((((((scorp))))))))))))))))) so sorry 4 your pain and misery, a beautiful poem? far from it
wish u well my friend . . .
Ben
aka Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Hand Of Love
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 4th June 2005 @ 07:07:54 PM AEST
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Heart-breaking to read.
I do hope that you are not still within this relationship.
It is so difficult to break the chain.
My support is here.
I am so sorry, hon. |
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Re: Hand Of Love
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by lovingcritters on
Saturday, 4th June 2005 @ 07:13:41 PM AEST
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Oh Dear Scorp, my sister in the Insanity Club. You may not be listening right now, it takes a long time to rid yourself of this kind of possession, but without feelings, run , run, run. I can't emphasize this enough. I was an advocate at the "SafeHouse" here and I'm telling you that you are in mortal danger!!!!
I was married to one........they are sick, sick, sick, and it's they we should put in a strait jacket.......Please I beg of you, go for counseling, do something, just anything, Rita is right, he will kill you for sure!
Beautifully written poem, and I hope it's just fictional, but sounds so real to me!
Warm love and hugs
lovingcritters
Consue
Thanks much for your comments Scorp...we all love you...........and what you are experiencing now is "Sunshine" it's dark and dangerous! |
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Re: Hand Of Love
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by lovingcritters on
Saturday, 4th June 2005 @ 07:16:13 PM AEST
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Sorry Scorp, what I mean to say is what you are experiencing now is NOT SUNSHINE!
ConSue and although this is past tense. If you are still living with this freak..........Run! |
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Re: Hand Of Love
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by jyssvw22 on
Saturday, 4th June 2005 @ 08:04:56 PM AEST
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hey scorp nice write as usual
you must spend hal your day just thanking people for their comments..lol...its a good thing..lol..bye bye |
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Re: Hand Of Love
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by Man_On_High on
Saturday, 4th June 2005 @ 08:21:30 PM AEST
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so very haunting..actually..downright terrifying
a nightmare on the screen before me-
much love to you my friend..
Billy |
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Re: Hand Of Love
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by sprinter27 on
Saturday, 4th June 2005 @ 08:55:35 PM AEST
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the poem is great. and it says past tense, so i totally hope it means this guy is a part of your past, not present or future. hoping your scars and wounds heal soon. wishing you the best of luck!
~sprints
p.s. keep up the good work, scorp! |
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Re: Hand Of Love
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 4th June 2005 @ 09:46:49 PM AEST
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| this has got to be nothing short of magnificent, damn I got cold chills, you done a perfect job with this piece.I am now in ahh with nothing more to say BUT THIS, GREAT WRITE |
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Re: Hand Of Love
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by Vampirequeen on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 12:28:30 AM AEST
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holy *****
sorry hugs
what a write it kinda saddens me.
good write and take care scorp |
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Re: Hand Of Love
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by mylastwords on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 12:39:50 AM AEST
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Sad sad write. I'm sorry. No one should have to go through that pain. Your poem expresses well. Emotive language well used. I'm glad it is past tense.
Wish you well,
xxooxx mylastwords xxooxx |
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Re: Hand Of Love
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by sride686 on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 12:41:48 PM AEST
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Damn scorp if this wasn’t past tense I was going to say a lot more. I’m sorry you ever had to feel this pain in your life. People like this guy you spoke off need to get whats coming to them. You’re a awesome person and its his loss now that its over. You truly write beautiful event when its pain you write about. Take care and know I’m always here if you need anything. Bye for now your friend….Steve
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Re: Hand Of Love
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by pixie on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 12:57:52 PM AEST
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wow hard hitting and deep, powerful words, I will be reading more from you in the future :)
pix xx |
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Re: Hand Of Love
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by sweetangeluk on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 07:14:51 PM AEST
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I do hope you are away from this relationship.
Past tense is where it belongs. The hand of control not the hand of love. Love is never hurting someone like this ever. There is just no excuse for doing this to another person.
(((HUGS)))
A heartfelt write
Love Angelxxx |
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Re: Hand Of Love
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by bethers_is_my_baby on
Monday, 6th June 2005 @ 08:34:59 AM AEST
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awwww, well im glad this is past tense:(
great write as usual thou! :)
*~peace and love~* |
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Re: Hand Of Love
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by Pisces101 on
Friday, 10th June 2005 @ 10:12:46 AM AEST
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scorp... this poem is amazing. this was the only poem on this site i've really enjoyed reading. awesome work doll. its amazing what comes from pain.
sarah |
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Re: Hand Of Love
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by Dorkfish on
Friday, 10th June 2005 @ 04:29:26 PM AEST
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| I wish I had read this one before asking you to read mine about my friend's dysfunctional relationship. Please tell me this is not really what you go through. It is a horrible thought that this might be happening to somebody. This is far worse then the situation I wrote about. If this is not your life, you have one hell of an imagination. I must say once again, great poem! You are awesome. Keep it up!!! |
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Re: Hand Of Love
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 23rd September 2005 @ 07:24:33 PM AEST
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Scorp u had tears pouring from my eyes. You absolutely broke my heart with this write. I commend u for being able to write about it. You're a courageous, smart, gifted and an absolutely talented young lady. Nobody should have to put up with this sorta ***** nobody. I only know too well my dear friend.
My heart and prayers are with u always dearest Scorp. Need a friend, I'm always here 4 u sweet girl.
Heartfelt hugs for a very special friend,
Sue, Dreamer |
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Re: Hand Of Love
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 7th June 2014 @ 11:38:27 PM AEST
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thankfully past tense... a brave write my friend, a brave
write, too many women do not leave, the man always
sorry, flower on the bed about did me in.............
love you my friend:)
hugs n' love nessa
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