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Without Me
Contributed by
blue_angel
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Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 03:29:45 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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You are a happy family
Without me
You are what you want
Without me
I see you together
Without me
Having fun
Without me
You are a perfect family
Without me
You are what others see
Without me
I see you together
Without me
Laughing and smiling
Without me
You are a happy family
Without me
You are what you want
Without me
Go right ahead
Without me
Be a family
Without me
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2005-06-05 15:29:45]
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Re: Without Me
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by dreamer_for_eternity on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 03:35:08 PM AEST
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| wow, you have some strong emotions in this one!!! I loved the repetition of the line "without me", it really set a tone... but maybe you should talk to a family member about this, it may be hard but it'll be worth it. Perhaps they don't know you feel this way, it's probably unintentional, and maybe the pain you have is from over-analyzing situations. Make an effort for quality family time. Good write, this is very well written, and good luck with your family. |
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Re: Without Me
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by Jaycee on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 11:49:09 PM AEST
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| I have to agree with the other comment, the repetition of Without me works oh-so-well. We can't choose our family members. That's why so many ppl choose a life outside of the house. I know your situation is bad, and I wish it were better. All I can say is that there are ppl who are happy to have you say "with me" instead of "without me". |
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