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Fifteen Years
Contributed by
blue_angel
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Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 09:32:07 PM in AEST
Topic:
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i'm dying slowly
i'm choking on breath
summoning soley
worshiping death
myself isolated
armed with a knife
cold and tormenting
threatening life
dwelling in sorrow
drowning in tears
sadly remember
fifteen painful years
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2005-06-05 21:32:07]
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Re: Fifteen Years
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by sprinter27 on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 09:38:42 PM AEST
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awesome poem, jennie. but please stay with me. and use me... i have 2 shoulders- 1 for you, 1 for kc. please don't go. keep up the good work, though!!
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Re: Fifteen Years
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 10:42:43 PM AEST
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oh so moving and sad........your poem is beautiful and i love your word use and rhyming style
i also feel like this all the time but please hang in there.......well done again, you are a promising poet
i wish u all the hope in the world |
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Re: Fifteen Years
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by Jaycee on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 11:14:17 PM AEST
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| Jennie: I will comment more on your blog, but what happened this weekend... well, that stuff happens. It's like what happened on Friday. Crappy stuff is going to happen and you'll lear who your friends are. You are better than D and the others. You have good friends who care for you and in them you can find those who care. Do not let lesser ppl drive you back to the knife. They are not worth it! |
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Re: Fifteen Years
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by mylastwords on
Monday, 6th June 2005 @ 01:26:02 AM AEST
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I really like this, it is short and concise. Direct and emotional. I like the rhythm too. Please don't kill yourself though. You can get through this. There are people that want to help and if you need 1 more friend, I am always here. I used to cut and I know how hard it is to stop and not go back. It is so tempting, I went back time and time again. Good luck, know that I am here too!
xxooxx mylastwords xxooxx |
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Re: Fifteen Years
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by Arden on
Monday, 6th June 2005 @ 01:19:09 PM AEST
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I'll be honest with you on this.
poems like this should not be so short. your throwing your emotions right out in peoples faces and it , at times, will scare a person. you need to slowly dive into it, explain emotions and such on a deeper more imagintive level. the poem was blunt and outright cliché. 2/5
(sorry if i sounded mean)
-Rebekah |
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