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Without a Trace
Contributed by
justingunshin
on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 11:06:45 PM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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You're sucking my life out like leeches
Trapped in a coma, with a face full of stitches
What you left of me, still survived, you should
of killed me, but now I'm completely revived
Coming back with nothing but revenge
I had driven the blade into your heart.
while your lifeless body, flew into the dirt
Igniting a match, watching you burn.
As you fell into pieces, it was your turn
Then it had begun to rain, the ashes floating
away with all the evidence of your pain.
Becoming unstable, while having been possessed
by a demon inside my brain.
I had become deceased and sick.
I've become as stiff as a steel sword
while any good moments of you and me
The created hate stealing the times we had
As to this day, I try to live in peace
Trying to forget about your flaming face
The day.... you drifted away..
Without a trace.
Copyright ©
justingunshin
... [
2005-06-05 23:06:45]
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Re: Without a Trace
(User Rating: 1 )
by Vampirequeen on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 11:21:59 PM AEST
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why Justin you did an awsome job in rewriting jens poem.
Its abit dark and even chilling but you express it to a T .Great job.
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Re: Without a Trace
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by lovingcritters on
Tuesday, 7th June 2005 @ 12:30:01 AM AEST
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Wow this was great. A little too dark for my taste, but then those kinds of poems also rate.
Welcome, Welcome, To YPDC....you're gon' love it here along with your mom....we just love her and now we can love you too!
I give you a 5 for this one
Well Done
Lovingcritters
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Re: Without a Trace
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 11th June 2005 @ 11:35:31 AM AEST
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*claps* Nice!! I don't know what the original was like, but this is just awesome...
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