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Children
Contributed by
mindset
on
Tuesday, 7th June 2005 @ 05:24:16 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Our youth our last expire For them we seek what we have lost To educate a place a road cross Yet as we as them we never listen But they hold the world expression Words to youth listen to those expired Old and bold lost untold we speak our words of reason You dont see You carry the old's last sea Your sail now mind set full gail Shall we say you carry words of a bird old an flown I say you hold the golden word Dont throw it away cast it carefull Our future now flows in the vein insaine Many old have looked the mirror For them of new be that reflection Now the word lays down a place to reflect Dont take advantage of the lake of pure suggest Children I hope you listen Time draws near its the age impression To be the early only to forget now your old Never forget the words of bold.
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mindset
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2005-06-07 17:24:16] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Children
(User Rating: 1 ) by jc18 on
Tuesday, 7th June 2005 @ 06:03:12 PM AEST (User
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It's a good poem with a good message, but I think it was a little hard to read, because the words didn't flow right. I think a poem should be simple for the mouth, but creative for the mind. |
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Re: Children
(User Rating: 1 ) by Iamyown on
Wednesday, 8th June 2005 @ 02:54:45 PM AEST (User
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i like it alot it has a good message, and its put together with thought. i like the wording it makes you think, and thats the great thing about poerty it has no boundries so try to create one. i love it |
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Re: Children
(User Rating: 1 ) by mindset on
Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 01:29:49 PM AEST (User
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IamYown a man who to be listened who has found the right question who dont need no answer .......
Total to a man who see's real word life :)
And my friend............. |
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