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eternal flame
Contributed by
vampirelover
on
Tuesday, 7th June 2005 @ 07:20:42 PM in AEST
Topic:
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the higher it gets
the longer it burns
the longer i sit
the more i learn
i can sit and wonder
of what life brings
and what's life's
true meaning
i sit here as the flame grows high
knowing if i lose you
how hard i would cry
an eternal flame can burn forever
and i truly hope we last that way
you bring me so much joy
even though it's been 1 month
i can truly say
i love you
and hope you can stay
your one who understands me
and can truly see
the real me
in the eternal flame
and what i've been thinking
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vampirelover
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2005-06-07 19:20:42]
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Re: eternal flame
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by sick_n_twisted on
Tuesday, 7th June 2005 @ 08:02:46 PM AEST
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| nice poem ! thats how i feel right now in my life....i really hope it works out for the best |
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Re: eternal flame
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by MorningDove on
Tuesday, 7th June 2005 @ 08:17:35 PM AEST
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I like the poem but it needs to be broken into structured verses. Your spelling is good and you got your point across well. Just seems more like a personal letter than a prose or poem.
smiles
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Re: eternal flame
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 8th June 2005 @ 02:24:18 PM AEST
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I like the poem, its straight forward of what you feel. I think I've read one of your poems before and I liked it too. Im not sure if I commented on it though....anyway, my point is, keep up the good work!
Always,
Courtney
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