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Her Final Minuet
Contributed by
eyesxcriedxout1989
on
Wednesday, 8th June 2005 @ 07:15:30 PM in AEST
Topic:
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With stuttered breaths
She takes the stage
Seated at the bench
Her fingers delicatly trace
The preconcieved pattern
The first note rings from
Her darkened melodic thoughts
And as her hands sweep
Across the nameless keys
The audience lets out
Their held breaths
And their tongues so filled
With caution are held as well
The high notes ring
In every ear, and
Every thunderous low
Pierces the thoughts of
One more person
The puzzling rythym
And the deep melody
Of all her thoughts
Dreams of love fulfilled
And she thinks she has
No love to give
She thinks she is nothing
And the audience knows
Her thoughts through minor chords
As the last notes are pounded
With such fierce aggression
There isn't a dry eye in the crowd
The last chord weeps of depression
And the sightless faces
Are tear soaked with realization
And as the priest takes the tape
And hands it to her parents
The pall-bearers carefully lower
The casket into ground
Her audience weeps because
They witnessed her melodic, lyrical tragedy
Her final minuet
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Re: Her Final Minuet
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by Destiny on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 11:30:51 PM AEST
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| I find it hard to write after a while personally. And even posting on here after an extended time seems a bit weird. I've recently done the same. |
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Re: Her Final Minuet
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by emocutie07 on
Friday, 24th June 2005 @ 11:34:13 PM AEST
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Still in awe love
Oh mason..how you've captured my heart
Missyou..soo much |
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Re: Her Final Minuet
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by emocutie07 on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 10:41:42 PM AEST
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| don't ever become someone's slogan because ::*you*:: are poetry |
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Re: Her Final Minuet
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by Archie on
Monday, 22nd August 2005 @ 07:03:44 PM AEST
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I was refered to your poem by an unknown writer. I must admit that this poem is well written. It is similar in a lot of ways to this poem I wrote called "Concert in L-minor"
"And sorrows song
rings with much laughter
on tongues of old
and bitter men."
"The words echo throughout the theatre
All the instruments playing perfectly
Every voice ringing on key
And then it is over
The conducter opens his eyes and exits the stage
alone"
You definately have something to say as the unknown writer has pointed out, and I will be adding your name to those poets I check out when I read.
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Re: Her Final Minuet
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by Archie on
Tuesday, 25th April 2006 @ 01:45:57 PM AEST
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| This is not bad. Your poem reminds me of one I wrote called Concert in L-minor. If you get a chance to read it tell me what you think. You poem has a more graphic ending than my poem and your poem is longer but what they speak about is very similar. Great write. |
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Re: Her Final Minuet
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by deusdeira on
Friday, 4th February 2011 @ 01:52:09 AM AEST
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| Beautiful, very descriptive, i could feel it, and see it as I read. Nice job. |
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Re: Her Final Minuet
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Saturday, 15th November 2014 @ 12:00:42 AM AEST
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| Mason, One hell of a masterpiece to come back with. I know you posted this many years ago, but I hope to see you on here soon. Love you man |
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