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Shattered Torn and Broken
Contributed by
LostSoul666
on
Saturday, 11th June 2005 @ 07:50:33 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Her eyes covered with pure hate
You cant save her, for its too late
The girl so perfect and nice
Frozen from the world like ice
the girl so sweet
Getting hit and beat
The unbreakable girl finally broke
Lost is all, lost all hope
Locked up pain slowly slipping out
Unseen feelings roam about
Unleashing her dark side
You better run, you better hide
She takes her knife & releases the pain
Wondering why everyday is the same
Another day of horror, another day of hate
Its just her destiny, its her fate
She slowly drinks her own posion as seconds go by
Tasting the sweet & sour liquid ready to die
She sits there and waits broken & torn
Wanting out, no longer wanting more
Next think you know she passes out
Without a shred of regret, not a pout
Only joy and a smile on her face
It was worth it even if she didnt like the taste
Darkness falls apon her lifeless body
Someone so great..so hard to believe
Nobody would of known, nobody could of guessed..
This was her last solution..her best
People look at her lifeless face
As memories of her sting their minds like mace
They wish to forget and live without knowing
But its too late, they are to blame for her going
Her shattered dreams so haunt them everynight
They try to ignore it, they try to fight
But it never does go away
The regret and guilt tends to stay
Her voice talks to them all the time
As they scream and shout for her to leave their minds
She laughs and giggles as they cry
Driving them insane until they all died.
They couldnt handle it anymore, unable to bare
The images of her & her cold dark stare
Silenced and dead they all became
All even, equal, the same....
Copyright ©
LostSoul666
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2005-06-11 19:50:33]
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Re: Shattered Torn and Broken
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 11th June 2005 @ 07:56:52 PM AEST
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Powerful write here...I think you did quite well actually...Lots of emotion and dark despair...
Keep up the good work!
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Re: Shattered Torn and Broken
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by all_the_dead_roses on
Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 12:03:09 AM AEST
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i really liked it. There was alot of emotion running through every line and that was really good cuz you could feel that, but the only advice I think I could give was that aybr you tried to rhyme to har like nice and ice or face and mace, Idon't think it's my place to say sice poetry is from the heart i'm just giving my point of view, but I definately did love it comment on mine whenever you write new ones so I can read them I would really love to. Good Job.
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Re: Shattered Torn and Broken
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by boobiepeach on
Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 04:06:58 PM AEST
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| wow very sad. great emotion. |
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