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Cry Me A River
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 03:17:41 PM in AEST
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There you go...
A walk down memory lane
on future love it puts a strain
3 a.m booty calls----
to one who wishes she never knew you at all
Wallowing in self-pity
Oh, poor YOU---it must be so ******
Here the broken record plays...
beginning to think this is NOT a faze
The only thing tied to Fate
is who's heart is made to wait
What will be will be...
those stuck in the past may never see
Past loves; never to be replaced
your poetic words come across two-faced
Awww my heart breaks---these tales of woe
stop mincing your words, and start to bestow!!
DOES THAT MAKE YOU WEAK??!??
I better shut up now, before I really speak....
Here I go.
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hauntedscorp
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Re: Cry Me A River
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by MorningDove on
Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 04:24:33 PM AEST
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OMG, I have heard this same old song and dance so many times with a love in my life. I was so stupid. It had nothing to do with love on his part. Co-dependency on mine. Girl, I hope you eventually see it and walk away too.
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 04:38:35 PM AEST
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| mmmm... k. (I've been here too long. I'm starting to see parallels!) Anyway, I can sense your frustration here which is well indicated. It's almost a slam poem even, although those are usually longer. Good write, scorp! |
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Re: Cry Me A River
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 06:34:59 PM AEST
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Great write, very well expressed, I wonder why often times the one we ache for is the one who can break the heart. Well done!
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Re: Cry Me A River
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by Zeldianus on
Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 07:50:53 PM AEST
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Compelling to say the least. I like it and I am sorry you are suffering so. I know first-hand what it is like.
Hugs,
-Seth |
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Re: Cry Me A River
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by Jyssvw on
Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 10:01:43 PM AEST
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| wow scorp..that was truely an amazing work of art...you are better then i thought...awesome job with this one |
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Re: Cry Me A River
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by Man_On_High on
Sunday, 12th June 2005 @ 11:21:23 PM AEST
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I'd love to hear the part
where you really speak.. lol
great write..
B |
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Re: Cry Me A River
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 04:38:12 AM AEST
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i like very much, and can greatly relate to your thoughts.
be strong, because no person has the right to continually hurt you |
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Re: Cry Me A River
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by sride686 on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 05:36:41 AM AEST
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| Wow what a mean and a very in your face write. Its good to get these things out and sometimes people need to here this when its true in their life. Yet another good write and its good to see you get these emotions out. Take care I’ve been gone for a few days but its good to be back on and read your work. Bye for now….Steve |
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Re: Cry Me A River
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by Willofree on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 11:58:44 AM AEST
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A provacative write that seems to exprees the uncertainty of remaining is such a painful relationship. Sounds like there is a real need to be candid and let loose with how you feel. Ah, but sometimes we worry if the other party can tolorate our candor. So we treat them as though they are fragil....the status quo....
A very difficult situation, one many can relate to. Thanks for sharing
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Re: Cry Me A River
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by In_a_while on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 01:50:34 PM AEST
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| Wow! i love your delivery! It's original and in you face! then, just before you're about to really let em have it.....you let em off the hook? how bout round two? anyways great write and thanks for sharing this emotionally charged piece. dw |
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Re: Cry Me A River
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by seci on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 05:44:51 PM AEST
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| your poem i like. i am now a fan. |
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Re: Cry Me A River
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 11:27:56 AM AEST
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Bitter perhaps, but interesting and thought provoking nonetheless.
I like the style of delivery here.I guess sometimes when we walk down memory lane the sun is shining and all is wonderful, other times it is pouring with rain and all we can think about are the darker times
Well done
Steve |
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Re: Cry Me A River
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 08:49:04 PM AEST
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| i love the saying, "cry me a river, build a bridge, and jump off of it" =] excellent show of feeling, scorpaporpa (that is my favorite nicname to call you if you havent noticed =]) i liked the beginning line and how the ending line ties in to it. your rhymes are on target, you know that capitalization is very good in moderation, you censor your own poems, theres a point, gets across emotion, and written well. you say you are not so great, and i can only disagree. oh yes, how can i forget originality? |
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Re: Cry Me A River
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by tiggytom on
Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 01:42:32 PM AEST
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| nice poem, something i feel everyone can relate to thnx |
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Re: Cry Me A River
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by sweetangeluk on
Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 05:45:23 PM AEST
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And dont it hurt. Brilliant hope things get better for u
Love Angelxxxx |
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Re: Cry Me A River
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 22nd July 2015 @ 12:09:10 PM AEST
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| Now that's got the Scorperiffic attitude!!!! WOW! |
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