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death is my escape
Contributed by
mel_666
on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 05:45:12 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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He came to me and said goodnight and I asked him if he truly believed it was good at all
He kissed me gently and I pulled away ever so slightly
He asked me to trust him and I turned and ran, ran far away from his so called trust
He said he wasnt hurting anybody but I knew if anybody was really getting hurt he wouldnt notice anyway
He asked me to follow him and I turned and ran in the opposite direction
He asked me to return his calls but instead I pulled the cord
He begged me to come back home and I told him it never really felt like home to me
He asked me to tell him about myself and I asked him if he really wanted me to tell him or just tell him what he wanted to
hear
He asked me to accept him and I said I had accepted my hate for him but that was all
He asked me to forgive him and I answered that forgiveness wasnt really in my nature
He asked me to smile and I said that I wasnt really in the mood
He told me to tell him where I was and I answered that I was anywhere but with him
He begged me to continue living and I looked in to his cold eyes and saw there was no point
He told me to drop that knife and I told him I wouldnt because thats what he wanted me to do
He asked me to love him and I said that I could never love anyone less
He told me to continue breathing and I refused as I took my last breath
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Re: death is my escape
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by xXcrossedXx on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 07:55:32 AM AEST
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I really really really like this. The ending is beautiful.. Great write you pute in a lot of thought.
--amanda-- |
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Re: death is my escape
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by spazz911 on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 08:10:13 AM AEST
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i agree the ending is beautiful, the power of ur emotion in your writing is magnificent, i can't wait to c more of ur poems,
kc |
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Re: death is my escape
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by slogan on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 09:08:25 AM AEST
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| I really like this piece.. Great write.. Your talent shines brightly for all to see and enjoy.. keep up the good work...jh |
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Re: death is my escape
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by PoeticMidnight on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 09:36:22 PM AEST
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| I've personally never experienced anything of this sort. But, you did a wonderful job of getting that feeling across in this. Near the end, I could see the things you described happening; the knife and your last breath. For some reason, it was beautiful to me. I love that this is not the typical suicide poem, this had strength in it, not so much ill-formed despair. I admire your originality in this! |
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