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you and i
Contributed by
rustygrl33
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Sunday, 5th January 2003 @ 07:00:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
SecretLove
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I never knew you existed/ My life was based on everything but you/ You were a total stranger/ I could have cared less about you/And if you had died I wouldnt have noticed/ Then one day without asking at all/ You walked thru the door of my life/ I fell in love with everything about you/But you didnt even know my name/I knew that if you had died/ I could have cared less if I did too/ My life was versed on you/ Then one day I died because of you/ You walked back out thru the door of my life/ And you didnt know me at all/ Then when I died from you and lived another life/ You turned around and looked at me/ You saw my existence and knew my love/ But not for you, I was single/ When you didnt know me / Now its too late Ive already said I do
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Re: you and i
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by Undeadsuperstar on
Sunday, 5th January 2003 @ 10:47:54 PM AEST
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| perhaps this is all wrong, but i got a sort of failed reincarnation theme in this one, i have also always liked the sort of "i loved you but you didn't know i existed" theme. It reminds meof that song desert rose by sting, but more melancholly, i like it, but one suggestion, instead of using backslashes, perhaps use the line by line approach, but then again, it's your work do what ever you want, i like it. |
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