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I'm spilling myself
Contributed by
In_a_While
on
Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 01:44:56 PM in AEST
Topic:
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i spilled all my insides
into bowls of cold soup
overflowing memories
make smiles now droop
i dragged my own body
to your doorstep again
still full of black fuel
i need you my friend
i'm bleeding black ooze
from my needles eye crying
clouds of red smoke
bring signs of the dying
i'm bubbling in fury
the steam burns me black
she loves me like fire
i can never go back...
...to myself.....to myself....
dw
Copyright ﾂｩ
In_a_While
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2005-06-14 13:44:56]
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Re: I'm spilling myself
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by sride686 on
Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 06:41:20 AM AEST
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| A good write and the reason why you got no comments is because it痴 a little hard to grasp the meaning is deep in it. I see a meaning of forever loss like you lost all you have and yourself to her and are forever lost in what you have become never able to turn back to what you once were. You want the past back but its to late she burned it up in the love and lust she brought into your life. But if I知 wrong I知 wrong like I said it was a little hard to grasp. Take care DW and if I知 write then it was a good write and if a I知 wrong let me know and I値l read it again. Your friend Steve |
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Re: I'm spilling myself
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 5th July 2005 @ 12:33:40 PM AEST
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Nice imagery and expression Dwayne...Good job, and I love the title.
Scorp. |
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