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Oh Thunderstorm
Contributed by
blue_angel
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Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 03:04:15 PM in AEST
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Oh thunderstorm
Please sing me to sleep
Hail while I cry
Rain while I weep
Skies they do darken
With emotion filled clouds
Oh thunderstorm
Break free and call loud
In the sky flashes
Of bright light so pure
A slice of sorrow
Well have to endure
Come anger from heavens
My tears you will cry
Oh thunderstorm
Please play till I die
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Re: Oh Thunderstorm
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by brew on
Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 03:15:13 PM AEST
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Cool analogy of the Thunderstorm. Liked it alot. Thanks for sharing.
Brew~ |
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Re: Oh Thunderstorm
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by Sinned on
Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 07:57:47 PM AEST
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blue_angel
Nice comparson to sadness using a thunderstorm
I think your ending could have been better---like
I am so lonly---sigh
But good write.
Sinned
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Re: Oh Thunderstorm
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by sride686 on
Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 06:34:29 AM AEST
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| A good write Jennie like always and its nice to read your work. I to have been gone for awhile are internet went down over here. You used a great comparison with the weather in this write and it came over really good. Keep up the good writes and I look forward to more. Your friend….Steve |
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Re: Oh Thunderstorm
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by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 02:44:09 PM AEST
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There is a lot of feeling to this poem, and sensitive images. Very well done, and highly poetic.
Andrew |
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Re: Oh Thunderstorm
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by Jaycee on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 05:16:04 PM AEST
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| Jennie, this is a beautiful poem, so full of vivid imagery, I can see the lightning and hear the thunder and the downpour. The connection between that and emotion is strongly connected and while I don't quite get the message content, I get the message powerfully. Nice vivid write. |
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