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Promise
Contributed by
happynikki
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Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 05:36:31 PM in AEST
Topic:
AngryPoetry
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this promise i kept
i wish was no more
the thoughts keep coming back
no matter what i wish for
you make me want to break it
you are a constant paint to me
my heart is tired of your hurt
you make me want to go back to cutting
I have so many scars
and i cry at them everyday
so what's a few more
that's what i say
you in my head
is hurting me
you make me want to break that promise
how is that for happy
you did this
you make me cry
so you fix it
or i may not make it to the next day
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Re: Promise
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by je2ica3 on
Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 05:48:37 PM AEST
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| your words are really deep i could practically fill your pain well i hope you make it to the next day keep writing *je2ica* |
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Re: Promise
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by xXcrossedXx on
Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 07:27:14 PM AEST
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From this poem you just seem like you want to be in pain. I think puncuation would be a key element and make your pain more visible.
Keep writing,
--amanda-- |
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