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Black Dressing Bride
Contributed by
In_a_While
on
Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 09:05:09 AM in AEST
Topic:
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well, back and forth we go
on a swing sometimes together
the sun setting the sky on fire
i think it's time to get her
sometimes, she's fury and fire
raging through words and trees
but then she can be like the rain
soothing like morning light's breeze
occasionally, she laughs till it hurts
and her stomach is pain deep inside
her blue rain turns to tears
now she's a black dressing bride
once in a while, we talk for no time
for no wind can blow for too long
i wait for pain's cloud to build
so she can fuel my fiery dawn...
occasionally...codependency's my worst enemy..
dw
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Re: Black Dressing Bride
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by FigurelessShadow on
Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 09:10:16 AM AEST
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Nice, its good. dark and romantic...
Well done
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Re: Black Dressing Bride
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by MorningGlory on
Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 09:41:54 AM AEST
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| I love the words you used to describe things in this poem...Beautifully written. |
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Re: Black Dressing Bride
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by sride686 on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 04:33:09 AM AEST
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| Well DW a very good write and like always very deep. You did use awesome words and it made in very romantic and dark at the same time. I haven’t read one like it very original keep up the good writes with your own style. I look forward to more take care…Steve |
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Re: Black Dressing Bride
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 06:26:27 PM AEST
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Great job Dwayne...Excellent, descriptive write. I'm impressed.
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Re: Black Dressing Bride
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by Man_On_High on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 09:23:21 PM AEST
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Bittersweet emotion..
I love the line:
"raging through words and trees"
awesome
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