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early morning visit
Contributed by
roisin
on
Sunday, 5th January 2003 @ 03:20:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
StoryPoetry
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tonite you came to my door to find me
in a state of dis-repair,
in explaination
I say
but it's always the same after a late night
of drinking and carousing with the locals.
yes, i'm a bit tired,
no, not a bad hair day
goin' for that mad woman bed head look
and yeah I do look a bit like I've been dressed
by my mam in clothes from the local charity shop......
but still..
you say
the hair, the clothes , it works, you know.....
i say
it's late, you're best off home
you say
I've been thinking hard about us
(then this time it's dante not yeats he quotes )
"this proximately without initimacy is hell"
I've fallen for you,
but,
a warning
be very, very careful of your feelings for me
and
I think
de ja vu?
I say
go home
you say
tomorrow we will talk
to be continued??????
Copyright ©
roisin
... [
2003-01-05 15:20:00]
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Re: early morning visit
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by wolfflow on
Sunday, 5th January 2003 @ 04:17:23 PM AEST
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well hey, sounds like fun, will watch this space
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Re: early morning visit
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 5th January 2003 @ 05:08:53 PM AEST
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Dear Roisin @-<-<<-
this is great! more more plz..
Your writing friend always Nessa |
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Re: early morning visit
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by dantoad on
Sunday, 5th January 2003 @ 08:13:25 PM AEST
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| that was good, really really good, i will look for more of these!! : ) |
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Re: early morning visit
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by nomad on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 06:59:17 AM AEST
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| Roisin, this is a great write. You capture tension and frustration well. To be continued? I hope not. You know the ending. |
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Re: early morning visit
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by thorns on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 03:48:50 PM AEST
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| um...ok. maybe i'll read the 2nd chapter when i can. |
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Re: early morning visit
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by mckayla on
Wednesday, 15th January 2003 @ 08:36:29 PM AEST
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This poem was great to read to!! keep them coming!!
mckayla |
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