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Winter's Dirge
Contributed by
bobotheclown
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Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 11:18:06 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Bathed in shadows that lie
dead before my feet.
Lonely hands rise from nowhere
Attached to wrists torn to pieces
Countless times by weakness
Ambition, dead, (like my heart)
Floating with the winds of sadness
Lost for days
Tumbling in the vortex of insanity
Numbed by alcoholism,
Yet the tears still flow inside
My mouth is dry and my head hurts
Frustration rears her ugly head
And wraps me in burial shrouds
Whispering words of encouragement
(That in the end amount to nothing)
Stagnant, like the passage of time
I rise from these ashes
Triumphant, only to find
I have gained nothing
These "thoughts" take hold
Thoughts that once soothed
With pleasant feelings and reassurances,
But now rise like bitter bile
Forced to choke back the tears
My face a stony mask of silence
Set with determination
And lined with years of pain
(Lighting candles to remember the torment)
Blinking back tears because of your senseless cruelty
The wounds you inflicted lie deep
Leaving my heart cold and dormant
I've walked this path to many times to feel
Anything but the pervading emptiness
There remains some comfort in silence,
But I can't take this much longer
Lying beside my broken, cold heart
I rise from these frozen ashes
Triumphant, only to find
I have gained nothing
Copyright ©
bobotheclown
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2005-06-15 23:18:06]
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Re: Winter's Dirge
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 11:29:07 PM AEST
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Very deep, heartwrenchig, write.
very sad but written like a pro.
huggs, prayer, hope,
emy |
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Re: Winter's Dirge
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by venkat on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 12:24:17 AM AEST
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| Sad and heart moving write..yet a good rise though you gain nothing..O.K you are always doing these poems wonderfully. Venkat |
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Re: Winter's Dirge
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 12:52:51 PM AEST
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Holy cow!
What was that about this sucking? You're kidding, right? You should be.
I like this, it's very descriptive and well written. I seems hollow in some ways, but incredibly full of feeling in others.
I especially like this part:
I rise from these frozen ashes
Triumphant, only to find
I have gained nothing
Great write,
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: Winter's Dirge
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by waos on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 07:59:34 PM AEST
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Joel that was really good. That one hit me. I guess cause I feel
so similar lately. Awesome write, you really caught the pain and had
images that just tear at my heart. You rock my socks off man.
~Kara |
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Re: Winter's Dirge
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by Fionndruinne on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 10:48:40 PM AEST
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Well, I felt the emotion infusing this piece. It is a true lyric - words from the heart, well and gracefully told. Yes, it is.
May your road rise up.
Andrew
(smiling at the author's note and thinking now this is what I should have said on that poem's note. and that one.... Slàn) |
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Re: Winter's Dirge
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by FleurdeSang on
Monday, 20th June 2005 @ 08:12:05 PM AEST
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Oh, my dear friend, when did ANY of your poems suck?? Not once, in my book, lol. A thought-provoking, heart-wrenching, tear-jerking masterpiece, cheri.. All woven by your golden pen. Magnificent and beautiful in its somber tune... An overwhelming torrent of helplessness and anguish drowned me... crashing over my head whenever I thought I could take a breath... I found myself slowly dying as you sank into your seemingly bottomless pit of nothingness and shame... Deliciously morbid and radiantly vivid... You never fail to impress and inspire. Thanks so much for this exquisite piece of poetic art, mon cheri Joel! LOVED IT! Hoping all is well. Miss you! *hugs*. All my love. Forever,
Your dear friend/avid fan,
~*Stephy*~ |
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Re: Winter's Dirge
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 26th June 2005 @ 07:21:04 AM AEST
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| Sucks? Lol, I think you're a little confused Joel ;] j/k. Truly, though. Awesome, awesome, awesome piece. If I had 1/5th of your talent I'd be happy. You're an amazing writer. |
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Re: Winter's Dirge
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by blowfish_jane on
Saturday, 2nd July 2005 @ 03:29:49 AM AEST
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HOLY CRAP!!! That was just awesome Joel. I'm more than impressed.
This has to be my favorite poem of yours, im out of words for this. THis was just "WOW".
Do tell me if your posting a new poem, i hate to be the last to read it.
Jane xoxx |
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Re: Winter's Dirge
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by Kie on
Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 08:45:44 AM AEST
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Your poetry is dramatic, incredible and often leaves me speechless.
Good to see you writing again Bo.
Kie |
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