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All These Reds and Shameful Greys
Contributed by
jyssvw22
on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 09:29:06 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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The moisture collects in the humidity
Sweltering working condition strain the body
The aspirations of those who inspire
The assault on a functioning autonomy
Where the fault
Of the calamity
Rests solely,
On me,
And my destructiveness
And its relentlessness
To reach a resolve
Each of us are involved
None of us are free
The capability
To adapt
To evolve
Has elapsed
Is deceased
The wheel reinvented, in a pretentious event
A stirring stick mixes the flammable elements
The melting pot crooked and bent
It contents rendered irrelevant
To the cause or its actualized intent
A capacity to indulge
A serious attempt to divulge
The truths
That you charge
Allegations of fraud
Assassinations of diplomatic
Immunity once frozen
Now thawed
Its the systematic
Desensitization
Of the youthful
Violence and death
To laud
And praise
The end of days
With all these reds
And shameful greys
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Re: All These Reds and Shameful Greys
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by Streamingdreams on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 09:33:45 AM AEST
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Hey..these are some serious metaphors!!
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Re: All These Reds and Shameful Greys
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by steven_fenton1982 on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 10:08:20 AM AEST
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| very good :D well done |
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Re: All These Reds and Shameful Greys
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by hauntedscorp on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 10:33:55 AM AEST
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Well done jyss...This one's really good. A couple lines in the first stanza have me pondering some things....Hmmm. Nice job.
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Re: All These Reds and Shameful Greys
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by Man_On_High on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 09:56:46 PM AEST
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as for me..
I think this is the best poem Ive seen here by you yet..
I could fill pages on how much I liked this one..
suffice it to say..this was brilliant:
"To laud
And praise
The end of days
With all these reds
And shameful greys"
just brilliant-
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